Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It have been a long time since movies portray violance in their movies in differents ways, some use it to portray the histroy of humankind, which wasn't peacefull and others portray it as recent violance that's happening nowdays but stil people might get confused if that violance is something that's help people to find mercy or it's only promote it to get them be more violant so it's basically encourages violent behaviour. Before discussing each side, we need to know first that the most important thing is to aducate ourselves and our kids that's movies are only movies and we shouldn't take them that seriously or we should only take the good part in them not the bad one and brags about it. For me i can't be in anyone sides because violance Is something real something happening right know while am writing those words but i guess both of them have his point of view, violance can be bad if it wasn't portray right if if wasn't necessairy but the creator of the movies just wanted character's that brags about it and that's bad, because some kids are watching and they might think it's something cool to do. In other hand, we need to see this violence so xe czn do something about it we shouldn't be ignorant we need to understand that's something happening everyday to every innocent person, ad by example it's happening to poor countries like Palestine for example. So in my opinion both sides are right, violance in movies can be a bad idea if it was portray as a cool thing or in kids movies but it's also necessairy to understand that there's evil and good in this world and we need always to do our best to not go in the evil side because people are going to suffer and there's going to be conséquences.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and give a personal position, especially when you say violence can be harmful if presented as “a cool thing” but can also help viewers understand real suffering. The examples about children copying characters and violence in Palestine are relevant. However, the discussion is only partly developed: the argument that fictional violence may be harmless is not clearly explained, and the response shifts between education, historical portrayals and real-world violence without showing how each supports the two views. Your position is also difficult to identify because you say you “can't be in anyone sides” before concluding that both sides are right. Explain each view in a separate, focused paragraph and state your own judgement consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some overall shape: you introduce the issue, consider possible harms and benefits, and finish with a conclusion. Linking phrases such as “Before discussing each side” and “In other hand” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, ideas are not arranged in a clear progression, and most of the response is one long paragraph, making the shifts in argument hard to follow. Several points are joined together with “and” or “but” rather than developed in distinct steps. The reference to Palestine, for example, appears without a clear transition explaining how real-world violence relates to fictional portrayals. Use separate paragraphs for the two views and your opinion, and make each paragraph’s main point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “violent behaviour,” “creator,” “innocent person,” and “evil and good,” so the reader can generally understand your subject and stance. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “violence” and “movies.” Frequent spelling and word-form errors, such as “violance,” “histroy,” “peacefull,” and “necessairy,” also make the writing less clear and controlled. Some expressions are imprecise, including “find mercy” and “brags about it,” which do not communicate your intended meaning naturally in this context. Build a wider set of accurate terms for media effects, such as “portrayal,” “imitation,” and “desensitisation,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and subordinate clauses, for example, “violance can be bad if it wasn't portray right,” showing an effort to express conditions and contrast. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries. Examples include “It have been,” “movies portray,” “it’s only promote,” and “both of them have his point of view.” The opening sentence also runs through several ideas without clear punctuation, which makes the relationships between them difficult to follow. Practise building accurate short sentences first, then combine them using controlled clauses. Pay particular attention to subject–verb agreement, past participles after “be,” and punctuation between complete ideas.

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