Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Few individuals believe that unreal violence show on TV screen is safe enjoyment. On the other side individuals differ and consider that it promote harmful behaviour.
Most of the people hear the news for entertainment and also saw the news the news for to telling other individuals that the country is safe and no any action in country is bad. Also the the children of these people become happy to saw that kind of news. That kind of people is not know the situation of country the people who unaware the news he say that kind of news. For Example, the people who do their job every time he don't know the real kind of news.
The individuals who know the all kind of news about their country and also the other country who's aware any type of real news because the tv channel news don't say the right news. He know the news channel do not say real news because their relitives on the news channel or news information right. For example Brother in with the news channel and he know all kind of good and bad news and he tell at home.
In my opinion, the people who's saw the news on news channel is eighty percent is saw the fake news. The news channel is not say the news absolute correct. On other side people who's say the news with the here of their brother is correct on the other person.
In conclusion, the people who's say news to here the television is correct by yourself, but in real he is not right. By contrast is here news the brother is valid news the other.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to address the prompt effectively. The task asks for a discussion on fictional violence on television, but the essay focuses almost exclusively on the reliability of news channels and personal anecdotes about family members. Because the content is largely irrelevant to the topic of 'fictional violence' and 'harmful behavior,' the response does not develop a clear position or provide relevant arguments. The ideas are disconnected from the prompt, making it difficult to identify a coherent response to the specific question asked.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is difficult to follow because the ideas do not progress logically. While there are paragraphs, the internal structure of each is weak, and the transition between sentences is often confusing. Referencing is frequently unclear; for example, the use of 'he' and 'the people' lacks specific antecedents, making it hard to track who the writer is referring to. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, leading to a disjointed reading experience that obscures the intended meaning.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic words like 'news,' 'people,' 'good,' and 'bad,' which are insufficient for an academic discussion. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'unreal violence show' instead of 'fictional violence' and 'with the here of their brother' which is unintelligible. The lack of precise terminology prevents the student from expressing complex ideas, and the limited range of vocabulary significantly hinders communication throughout the essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede understanding. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the people who's saw'), incorrect verb tenses, and sentence fragments. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. Basic punctuation and article usage are also inconsistent. The high frequency of errors throughout the text means that the reader must struggle to interpret the intended meaning, which is characteristic of a lower band score.
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