Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
violence is increasing day by day in the society. citizens proclaim that its is created by movies and films which are telecasted on tv and big screens by directors and others disagree with this statement its is for entertainment purpose and harmless . I will discuss both views and with my opinion in the upcoming paragraph.
To begin with, brutality which are shown in films are creating violence in the society like , youngster making groups and mass killing of rivals, against cops as well . which will unbalance the harmony and peace of the society. furthermore, if other people admire the same activity it can cause big destruction in the country for example , a movie "ANIMAL" which was going release in Indian cinema was denied by central board of film certification [CBFC] because of harsh cruelty by the leading actor.
On the another hand, television with heartless seen are made more ,because nowadays youngsters like show with more violence .which does not feel more boring and found them exciting. In addition, pupils found it more special because this kind of shows have more secret scene conspiracy murders and big heist done by the offenders. An extraordinary investigation made by police kind of scenes makes movie more captivating.
In my opinion, television should make show with neutral fighting scene with more entertainment and fun. by which people could not adopt scene in their real life and government should introduced strict rules against scene which are viewed on the show.
To conclude, learning fighting scene which are telecast on tv should be minimum and youngsters should not admire them because it is made for entertainment purpose only.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views and provides an opinion, fulfilling the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and occasionally repetitive. For instance, the argument regarding 'youngsters' is mentioned in both body paragraphs without significant expansion. The opinion is stated in the introduction and conclusion, but the supporting arguments in the body paragraphs lack depth and clear logical progression. The example of the movie 'Animal' is relevant, but the explanation of how it relates to the broader societal impact is underdeveloped. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a distinct, well-supported point that directly addresses the prompt's core tension between entertainment and behavioral influence.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'On the another hand' and 'by which people could not adopt scene' are used incorrectly, which disrupts the flow of ideas. The transition between sentences is sometimes abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the pronoun usage in the second paragraph. While there is a logical attempt to separate the two views, the internal cohesion within paragraphs needs more variety and precision to achieve a higher band score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choices and collocations, such as 'telecasted on tv', 'heartless seen', and 'secret scene conspiracy murders'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. The student relies on basic vocabulary and struggles to use less common lexical items accurately. To improve, the student should focus on learning collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary to express complex ideas regarding media influence and societal behavior.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('brutality which are shown'), article usage ('in the society'), and tense inconsistencies ('government should introduced'). Punctuation is also problematic, with misplaced commas and incorrect capitalization. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar structures limits the score. To progress, the student must focus on mastering subject-verb agreement, consistent verb tenses, and correct sentence punctuation.
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