Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Many people believe that the program on TV with violence scene entertain the spectators without radiating the negative impacts. While others argue that it has detrimental social issues, as many citizens are encouraged to be participated in criminal activities associated with violence. But in my opinion, with such programs, it might be beneficial to those who are under the pressure of violence can develop the idea about how to cope with that kind of issues. This essay will discuss both view before explaining my opinion.
Nowadays, multiple of programs with violence scene in TV are entertaining the people. Since people are at the state of hectic life style, they are using the movies or the series from Netflix to relax their mind. Most of the programs associated with fights and physical debate somewhat adventures for them. As they are entertaining themselves by spectating that kind of programs. For example, most of the old age people in mu country used to spectate that kinds of program to cope with the problem of monotonous. Consequently, they get entertained by it.
However, these sort of movies or series has some detrimental issues. The major issues associated with it is foster of some social crimes related with violence. Most of the people used to copy the action form the actors and used it as their behavior. Likewise,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address both views and provide an opinion, the final paragraph is incomplete, leaving the argument unfinished. The ideas presented, such as the notion that violent media helps people cope with stress, are somewhat underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence. To improve, you must ensure you complete the essay structure and provide fully extended arguments for each perspective. The failure to finish the response prevents a higher score as the task is not fully addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay shows some attempt at logical organization with an introduction and body paragraphs. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete nature of the final paragraph. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'However' and 'Consequently', but they are sometimes used mechanically or with grammatical errors (e.g., 'But in my opinion...'). Paragraphing is present, but the abrupt ending makes the overall structure feel disjointed. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, completed logical flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'physical debate' instead of 'physical conflict' or 'spectate that kinds of program' instead of 'watch these types of programs'. The repetition of words like 'entertain' and 'violence' limits the lexical variety. To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary and focus on learning common collocations rather than individual words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'the program on TV with violence scene entertain the spectators' (subject-verb agreement and article usage) and 'foster of some social crimes' (incorrect noun phrase construction). There is a limited range of complex sentence structures, and those attempted often contain errors. Punctuation is generally functional, but the overall control of grammar is inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement, article usage, and the correct formation of complex sentences.
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