Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays, There are many type of content is available in television. Some content include violence which make some thinks that it encourages violent behaviour among people and other believe It is not harmful content.
Watching content having violence on television is based on people preference. People usually like to watch different type of content such as violence in television just for entertainment purpose. People watch television and enjoy there time and they didn't encourage any violent behaviour in their life. There are also many movies had violence which people usually watch with their family or friends.
On other side people believe that watching violence on television affect people mind and encourage violent behaviour. For example, if person always watch violent content on his TV which make person always think of violent in their life. By watching such type of things make people angry, aggressive natural , not respecting other. It also affect mental illness for some people if it watch many times. Watch by children have make their mind in negative way.
In my opinion, violence should not be show to children as it affect their brain. It should be seen by adult people and watch just for entertainment purpose only. People should not be inspire from it and didn't change their behaviour as per fictional character or a person.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion. However, the essay is significantly under the 250-word minimum requirement, which limits the depth of the discussion. Ideas are presented but remain underdeveloped; for instance, the argument regarding the impact of violence on children is mentioned but lacks specific examples or logical expansion. The position is clear, but the overall development is insufficient to reach a higher band. To improve, you must expand your arguments with more detailed explanations and relevant examples to meet the length requirement and provide a more comprehensive analysis of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is limited and often repetitive. Transitions between ideas are sometimes abrupt, such as the shift between the second and third paragraphs. There is a lack of sophisticated linking words to connect sentences and ideas smoothly. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of cohesive devices (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'on the other hand') to create a more natural flow between your points and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, often relying on simple phrasing like 'content', 'people', and 'watch'. There are several instances of incorrect word forms, such as 'aggressive natural' instead of 'aggressive nature' and 'inspire from it' instead of 'inspired by it'. The range of vocabulary is limited and does not demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and collocations related to the topic of media and psychology, and pay closer attention to word forms and parts of speech.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'violence should not be show'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'if it watch many times'), and missing articles. The sentence structures are predominantly simple, with very few attempts at complex sentences. When complex structures are attempted, they often contain errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct subject-verb agreement and verb tenses. Once these are consistent, practice integrating more complex structures like relative clauses or conditional sentences to demonstrate a wider grammatical range.
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