Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Most people often think that the fake violence shown on the television is not a harmful entertainment , while some people also think that the violence shown on television gives room for people to express violent behaviour.
Generally , people watch the entertainment on television for fun and most time they enjoy the violence that comes with the entertainment, knowing fully well that it is just fictional and they just move on with it . They often express the emotions that come with scene such as Anger, Tears and some times laughter. This is most time entertaining to some people . Most mature people differentiate between fantasy and scripted media and take the shows as story telling
Apparently , some people learn how to be more violent when they watch some fictional violence shown on television . Psychologically , some people are moved by what they see therefore when they watch these scenes on television , they learn the tricks , and methods used in carrying out this violent act. most times , when young immature people are exposed to constant violence shown on media they make aggressive responses feel normal in everyday conflict resolution.
In Conclusion, Fictional Violence is mostly harmless entertainment for mature views , while constant exposure can make the young immature viewers more aggressive to real life conflict.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the essay is significantly under the 250-word minimum, which limits the depth of the discussion. While the main ideas are relevant, they are not fully developed; for example, the point about 'young immature people' could have been supported with a specific example or a more detailed explanation of the psychological impact. Because the response is under-length, it fails to meet the requirements of the task fully, resulting in a lower score for this criterion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. There is a basic attempt at using cohesive devices, such as 'Apparently' and 'In Conclusion'. However, the transitions between sentences are sometimes mechanical, and the flow within paragraphs is slightly disjointed. The use of referencing is generally clear, but the overall structure lacks the sophisticated linking required for higher bands. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the brevity of the content makes the logical progression feel somewhat thin.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. Phrases like 'fake violence' and 'not a harmful entertainment' are somewhat simplistic. There are some attempts at using topic-specific vocabulary, such as 'conflict resolution' and 'scripted media', but these are limited. The repetition of words like 'television' and 'violence' indicates a restricted range. To improve, you should focus on using more precise synonyms and collocations to express your ideas more naturally and effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, though the control over these is inconsistent. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'most time they enjoy' (should be 'most of the time') and 'mature views' (should be 'mature viewers'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and inconsistent capitalization (e.g., 'Anger', 'Tears'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to affect the overall clarity and professional tone of the writing.
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