Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In my opinion, fictional violance portraying on televsion is creating impressions of being influced for the community like young people and adults those who consumes television more than the middle age people. As they have not much experience of use of weapons and the loss caused by it. there always should be consultation before showing such stuff on screen. And guide of parrents must be with the kids who are watching violance stuff online as advisory add is playing on the side of screen which should be read. Before the release of such stories, the cast and makers of the movies should come on face to camera to clarify that the stunts are performed by the speicalists and there is no such things one can do it at home.I agree to the statement that it may encourage the audiance towards violent behaviour for the people like who carry weapons legally with them in their homes. Initiatives like check and balance on these communities should be observed and they may have fear of being punished by law. so the clarity between the violance and being judged,punished must be present between each and every person whi is thinking of that. But contrary to this, those who thinks violance on televsion is harmless and entertainment. it can not be justified beacuse several causes has been reported as FIR cases which discussed many of the young population tries to be impressed by the mafia and gangsters type of stories. And in terms of being like them they do such things that caused their future to end and as a bad contribution to the society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times unclear. For instance, the suggestion that actors should appear on camera to clarify that stunts are performed by specialists is a somewhat tangential point that does not directly address the core debate regarding the psychological impact of media violence. The argument regarding 'FIR cases' and 'mafia stories' is relevant but lacks specific, well-explained examples to support the claim. The position is present but could be more consistently articulated throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear paragraph structure, appearing as a single block of text which hinders readability. While there is an attempt to transition between ideas using phrases like 'But contrary to this', the logical progression is frequently interrupted by disjointed sentences. Referencing is often unclear; for example, the phrase 'those who thinks violance on televsion is harmless' is not followed by a clear counter-argument structure. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'violance', 'televsion', 'influced', 'parrents', and 'speicalists'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas precisely. Phrases like 'violance stuff' and 'on face to camera' are unnatural and demonstrate a lack of control over collocation and register. While the meaning is generally discernible, the persistent errors and lack of academic tone significantly impact the quality of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'those who consumes', 'those who thinks'), sentence fragments, and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'portraying on televsion' instead of 'portrayed on television'). Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after periods and commas used incorrectly. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. The majority of sentences contain errors, which prevents the response from reaching a higher band.

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