Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In modern generation, television has become more popular. While some argue that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment, others believe that it encourages violent behavior. I will examine for this essay and discuss both views and give opinion in conclusion.
For specific reason, we should avoid to see the fictional violence portrayed on television. By seeing this on tv our youngster will be dangerous in future. For instance, when youngsters has seeing this on tv, they learn about it that how to do crime and after that they can engage in crime. As a result, our new generation will be more violence for our society.
On the other hand, it can be useful to learn about the fictional violence portrayed. For instance, the fictional violence portrayed illustrate violent behavior. When people see this on television, they can learn about it carefully and always alert for this kind of situations. If they fall in this situation, they can solved this problem easily. As a result, people will be more alert about violence for this reason.
In conclusion, by discussing both views i want to give my opinion is that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmful entertainment and it encourages people to violent behavior.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 207 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, which remain superficial and repetitive. While you address both views and provide an opinion, the arguments are under-developed. For instance, the claim that watching violence helps people 'solve problems' is not logically supported or explained. To improve, you must expand your points with more detailed examples and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for a full discussion of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and repetitive. Phrases like 'For instance' and 'As a result' are used in almost every paragraph, which makes the flow feel somewhat forced. Additionally, the progression of ideas is limited by the lack of depth. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one to create a smoother, more natural flow of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently repeat the phrase 'fictional violence portrayed on television' throughout the text, which suggests a lack of lexical variety. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'youngster will be dangerous' (which is unclear) and 'more violence for our society' (which should be 'more violent'). To reach a higher band, you should aim to use synonyms and more precise collocations to express your ideas, rather than relying on the same basic vocabulary throughout the essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'In modern generation' (missing article), 'avoid to see' (incorrect verb pattern), 'youngsters has seeing' (incorrect tense and subject-verb agreement), and 'they can solved' (incorrect verb form). The sentence structures are mostly simple, with few attempts at complex sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement, correct verb tenses, and the proper use of articles. Increasing your range of sentence structures will also help improve your score.
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