Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some people think that the frictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment . Yes I am agree on the on this ways . There are many reason on this statement .

I think that they have negative effect of the television . First of all television is invention of the new modern thing that is useful the people they use for the upcoming newspaper read and watch on the television . Second of all, they use for the watching movies, dramas and the other things. Third of all, television use for the information about the world that where have some basic advantages . This is positive effect of the television . On the other hand , much the use of television is harmful of the eyes . The second reason much use of the television is dangerous for the human because the person no talk the other people . They low confidence of the person. This is effect of the television .

To summarize that the television is more edification of the human but there are many negative effect on it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to address the prompt effectively. The task asks for a discussion on fictional violence on television, but the essay focuses on the general advantages and disadvantages of television itself. Furthermore, the response is significantly under the 250-word minimum, which severely limits the development of any ideas. The position is unclear, and the arguments provided do not relate to the specific topic of violent content. Consequently, the response is largely off-topic and fails to meet the basic requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into very short, simplistic paragraphs. While there is an attempt at logical progression using transition words like 'First of all' and 'Second of all', the ideas themselves lack coherence because they do not support the prompt. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and repetitive. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult to follow the writer's train of thought. Paragraphing is present but does not effectively structure the argument, as the content within the paragraphs is disjointed and lacks a clear thematic focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'frictional' instead of 'fictional' and 'edification' used incorrectly to describe the utility of television. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, relying on basic, repetitive phrasing like 'television is invention of the new modern thing'. The errors in word formation and collocation are frequent and occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, such as 'television use for the information' and 'they use for the watching'. Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent spacing around commas and periods. The attempt at complex structures is largely unsuccessful, leading to fragmented or confusing sentences. The high frequency of basic grammatical errors makes the text difficult to read and significantly impacts the clarity of the communication.

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