Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The fictional play's important role in movies, news, books, television show's, dramas and video games. now a day's the technology is advanced and people need to get know about it.
This is the life changing effect on the people. it's also learning machine for the young people. we get to know about each and everything on news everyday that what is going on in our country and world. each and every information is introduced to new people. sport's channels also give a great pleasure because people who can't afford to go and watch matches in the stadium .they can sit and relax at there home and enjoy it on the television.
Video games also have a greater thrill and learning aspect for the young generation. people who are not physically fit and can't participate in sports activities. can sit in one place anywhere which look is for them and play indoor video games. family drama's also have nationwide spread because the nature of the world is discussed over there. life changing movement's. history of the ancient people. cartoons for little one's.
Some people disagree a lot at some area's they are right. the advancement of AI has also played a negative role in the future. the young generation, is not taught properly by there parent's because they are busy in there own social activities and running behind the money.so they get a great chance to use it negatively. fake AI videos are made to blackmail anyone. giving fake news's on the Tv. other useless drama's are also going where people are promoting drug's and adultery.
By concluding this i suggest this should be portrayed in the positive way. young people should be guided with humble aspect's from there starting age. each and every social media should be filtered. the countries only progress those who are working in a balance way.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response addresses the prompt only partially. While it touches on the topic of television and media, it fails to focus specifically on the core issue of 'fictional violence' and whether it is harmless or encourages violent behavior. Much of the content discusses general benefits of television, such as sports and news, which is irrelevant to the specific question asked. The student's own opinion is not clearly stated or developed throughout the essay. The ideas are largely disconnected from the prompt, leading to a lack of focus and insufficient development of the required arguments regarding the impact of violent media.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear logical progression. Paragraphs are not well-structured, and the transition between ideas is often abrupt or confusing. For example, the shift from discussing sports channels to video games and then to AI feels disjointed. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, making the text difficult to follow. The use of referencing is often unclear, and the overall organization does not support a coherent argument. The essay reads more like a collection of loosely related sentences rather than a structured discussion of the two views presented in the prompt.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic or inappropriate word choices. There are frequent errors in word formation and collocation, such as 'learning machine' instead of 'educational tool' and 'humble aspect's' which does not fit the context. The student struggles to express complex ideas due to a restricted range of vocabulary. Furthermore, there are numerous errors in the use of apostrophes (e.g., 'show's', 'day's', 'sport's', 'drama's', 'one's'), which indicates a lack of control over basic punctuation and word forms. The vocabulary is insufficient to convey the intended meaning with precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. Sentence structures are simple and often fragmented, such as 'The fictional play's important role in movies...' which lacks a main verb. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and punctuation. The misuse of apostrophes is pervasive throughout the text. While there is an attempt to use complex ideas, the lack of grammatical control means that the meaning is frequently obscured. The majority of sentences contain errors, and the range of structures is very limited, preventing the expression of more nuanced arguments.
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