Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The debate over the impact of onscreen violence has intensified with rise of media . While other individual believe that fictional violence are merely harmful , however , some argue that it may impact the behaviour of viewers . In this essay , i will discuss both view in forthcoming paragraph with logical conclusion .
To commence with , there are myriad of reasons why fictional violence are less harmful ? First and foremost people are fine mature that they can distinguish between reel and real . People love to watch action movies for entertainment purpose . To elucidate , Through film people enjoy criminal crime shows but never commit as it is for entertain purpose .
On the other hand , there is study which say action movies are really impact the children as they try to be like a character of movie . To cite an example , in the study of West London Universities they found many people commit crime by inspiring from visual representation .
Agumalating aforementioned it could be projected that individual can difference between right and wrong . However , screen time of children can be minimisied to reduce the impact of action movies .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both views on fictional violence and offering a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited due to the under-length nature of the essay, containing only 201 words compared to the minimum requirement of 250 words. While the position is generally clear, the supporting arguments, such as the mention of West London Universities, lack sufficient elaboration and depth. Consequently, the task is addressed only partially, aligning with the criteria for Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into four paragraphs, showing an attempt at a logical structure. However, paragraphing and cohesive devices are often mechanical or misused. Phrases like 'To commence with' and 'Agumalating aforementioned' are awkward and unnatural. Referencing and logical progression are weak, with abrupt transitions between sentences and ideas, which reflects the characteristics of a Band 5.0 performance.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The lexical range is limited and frequently inaccurate. The student uses basic vocabulary alongside noticeable errors in word choice and form, such as 'fictional violence are', 'finely mature', 'criminal crime shows', and 'minimisied'. Spelling errors and incorrect word formations impede communication at times. The use of uncommon lexical items is attempted but largely unsuccessful, placing this performance firmly at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but complex structures are frequently faulty, such as 'While other individual believe that fictional violence are merely harmful , however , some argue that it may impact...'. There are frequent errors in article usage, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation, which can cause difficulty for the reader and align with a Band 5.0 score.
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