Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Nowadays authorial voice is very harmless some individuals reflect that frictional voilence is protayed on television us very harm lesss entartinment. others beleive that disagree and think that it encourages voilent behaviour. this eassy discuss both views and opinion.
In one hand, frictional voice is harmless beacuse when some people are transporting the voices into telivision it is not lead harmfull. for example, many movie makers promote and add the frictional voice in films and send into the theater and many people enjoy on that it is not an issue. another reason is that numerous individuals are thinking authorial voice is very harmful it not an dangerous it is very harmless and that is entartinment individuals can enojy on that scenes.
on other hand, people reflecting encourages voilent behaviour. some individuals believe is not an voilent issue beacuse film makers are promoting the entartinment on scenes and people are enjoying. for instance, i am going movies in every weekend i see so many frictional voilenes but i am thinking it is not an voilent scenes and i enjoyed on that movies.
From my perspective, every one should go to movies and watch the films. enjoyed on that and support to them encourage the system it is not an frictional voilence it is very convenient for peole and entertainment.
In conclusion, they both have their opinions. in my way frictionaal voice is not an issue every one should enjoy on that and it is useful for entertainment and it is not an violent behaviour remember this point.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to discuss both views regarding fictional violence on television, but the ideas remain very limited and underdeveloped. The student states an opinion ('From my perspective, every one should go to movies...'), but the reasoning is repetitive and lacks clear, logical support. Instead of discussing the core debate on whether television violence encourages harmful behaviour in society, the text wanders into generalized statements about going to movies and enjoying entertainment. Key terms from the prompt, such as 'frictional voilence' and 'authorial voice', are misused throughout the text, suggesting a misunderstanding of the prompt's vocabulary. Consequently, the task is addressed only partially, earning a Band 4.0 under the official task achievement descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response exhibits severe issues with logical organisation and progression. While the student attempts basic paragraphing to separate different viewpoints, the ideas within and between paragraphs do not flow logically. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with repetitive transitional phrases like 'in one hand', 'on other hand', and 'in conclusion' failing to establish clear relationships between sentences. Furthermore, excessive referencing errors and poor sentence construction make the progression of thought difficult to follow. Pronoun referencing is frequently unclear, and the text lacks overall coherence, aligning closely with the Band 4.0 descriptors for this criterion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is extremely basic, repetitive, and often inaccurate. The student frequently misuses words, such as substituting 'fictional violence' with 'frictional voice' and 'entertainment' with 'entartinment' or 'entartinment'. Other terms like 'authorial voice' are used completely out of context. Spelling mistakes are pervasive throughout the response (e.g., 'voilence', 'protayed', 'beleive', 'eassy', 'telivision'). These lexical deficiencies and spelling errors frequently strain the reader and obscure the intended meaning, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and heavily flawed sentence structures. The response contains frequent and severe grammatical errors, including missing subjects, incorrect verb forms, and distorted sentence patterns (e.g., 'others beleive that disagree and think that it encourages voilent behaviour'). Punctuation is largely neglected, with sentences frequently failing to use capital letters at the beginning or periods at the end. These pervasive errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and distort the meaning across almost every sentence, which corresponds to a Band 4.0 rating.
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