Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The debate srounded the fictional violence to depicted on television is harmless. Some peopel belive that the fictional violence represented on tv is inoffensive entertainment. Others observed that it encourages aggressive behhaviour. I will discuss both persepect in upcoming paragraphs.

In modern era, television plays an vital role in humans life. many people like to watch action shows that destracted from their stress. To explain , they like to watch serial or movies about fiction violence because they feel stress and frustrated from their life it can heklp the peple to release stress and distracted from real -life blue print. In addition, most people easily separate secript friction from real life and understand the fantastic element like superhero. For example, movies like superhero avengers features cosmic battles and destruction from real life it help to release the stress.

On the other hands, it have negative consequences like when youth watch fiction violence on tv it put negative impact on them, while child naturally learn by mmicing what they see and when television hero used violence than they also copy the same thing. Moreover, if children watch serials and action movies like fiction violence when they watch long time they feel the physical pain of actor and they could be acept aggressive as normal problem solving tool. For instance , lost of people like good guy beat the bad guy to save the day teach children that violence is justified if you doing right things but if they watch animation cartioons than they stuck or struggle in reality or unreality .

In conclusion, it both have positive and negative outcomes if people watches fiction violence on tv for release stress is ok but some children because they watch over it cause aggressive behaviour.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—that fictional violence is harmless entertainment and that it encourages aggressive behavior—and provides a personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the argument about stress relief is mentioned multiple times without being significantly extended or varied. While the position is clear throughout, the reasoning tends to generalise rather than fully elaborate with deep examples. These characteristics place the response firmly in Band 6, as it addresses all parts of the task with relevant ideas, though some parts are under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into discernible paragraphs, following a logical introduction, body paragraphs for each view, and a conclusion. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. The student attempts to use transition markers like 'In modern era', 'To explain', and 'On the other hands', but these are sometimes awkward or inaccurate. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as pronoun use referring back to abstract concepts. Paragraphing is present, but overall progression can feel disjointed due to choppy sentences and mechanical linking. This fits the Band 5 descriptors, where there is some organization and paragraphing, but cohesive devices are inadequate, inaccurate, or repetitive, resulting in a lack of clear overall progression.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'aggressive behaviour', 'cosmic battles', and 'consequences'. However, there are frequent spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including 'srounded' instead of 'surrounded', 'peopel' instead of 'people', 'destracted' instead of 'distracted', 'secript friction' instead of scripted fiction, and 'cartioons' instead of cartoons. While these errors are noticeable and detract from the quality of the writing, they do not entirely impede communication as the reader can still grasp the intended meaning. This performance corresponds to Band 5, which features a limited but minimally adequate range with noticeable errors that may cause some difficulty for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some capability to construct multi-clause sentences. However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with a high frequency of errors across the text. Examples include run-on sentences and punctuation issues, missing articles ('television plays an vital role in humans life'), subject-verb agreement issues ('it have negative consequences'), and incorrect verb forms ('when television hero used violence than they also copy'). Because the errors are frequent and pervasive, they often cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the structures from being controlled. This aligns with Band 5, featuring a limited range of structures and frequent errors in grammar.

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