Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In recent years, it is widely debated that television fictional violence is merely safe entertainment ans it has no impact, however numerous individuals believe that it trigers violence. Taking both sides of the argument, I claim that this form of programs can be detrimental especially for younger viewers. In this essay I will explain some reasons with example in order to support my opinion.
Proponents of the first view, many people believe fictional violence is harmless. One of the main reasons is that they believe that this type of violence is not real. Individuals can differentiate between fiction nd reality. They knws that it just acting and all the actions are fake. Secondly, mature audience are intersted in that types of movies and dramas and it provide excitement to the viewers.
On the other hand, I believe that the negative consequences of such content outweight its entertainmet value. Firstly, constant exposure to violence makes people insensitive to real violence. Consequently, as a result of it become normal for citizens, especially children tend to imitate aggressive acts they observe on television. For instance, crimes insired by action movies behaviour in schools after violent shows. Additinally, it has adverse impact on children.
In conclusion, although fictional violence seen harmless to mature people, its adverse effects on society, particularly n the youger generations cannot be ignored. I believe it has more
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the task by discussing whether fictional violence is harmless or encourages aggressive behavior, and the student provides a personal opinion. However, the essay is incomplete, abruptly cutting off at the end, and fails to meet the minimum word count of 250 words, standing at 228 words. This penalises the overall task achievement score. While the main ideas—such as maturity, imitation, and desensitisation—are introduced, they are under-developed due to the truncated conclusion and limited elaboration in the body paragraphs. For instance, the phrase 'crimes insired by action movies behaviour' is grammatically broken and lacks the necessary extension expected for higher band levels. To improve, ensure you fully develop every argument with complete sentences and reach the required length.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay demonstrates an attempt at logical organisation with a traditional introduction, body paragraphs, and a brief concluding sentence. Paragraphing is utilised to separate distinct ideas, such as proponents' views versus opposing arguments. However, cohesion is often faulty or mechanical. Transition phrases like 'On the other hand' and 'Firstly' are used, but the progression within paragraphs is disrupted by awkward referencing and incomplete sentences. For example, 'Consequently, as a result of it become normal for citizens' contains repetitive and confusing cohesive ties. Furthermore, the abrupt ending without a proper summary negatively impacts the overall flow and structural coherence of the piece.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting words such as 'detrimental', 'desensitisation', and 'consequences'. However, there are numerous lexical and spelling errors throughout the text, including 'ans' instead of 'and', 'trigers' instead of 'triggers', 'nd' instead of 'and', 'knws', 'intersted', 'outweight', 'entertainmet', 'insired', 'Additinally', and 'youger'. These errors reflect a lack of proofreading and impede communication in places. While the student attempts less common vocabulary, the high frequency of spelling and word-form inaccuracies restricts the lexical score to a Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writing exhibits a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'In recent years, it is widely debated that...' and 'although fictional violence seen harmless...'. However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with frequent errors that cause difficulty for the reader. Notable errors include missing verbs or incorrect verb forms ('fictional violence seen harmless', 'it become normal'), preposition errors ('impact on children' vs 'impact of'), and unfinished sentence structures at the very end of the essay ('I believe it has more...'). The proportion of error-free sentences is relatively low, placing this performance in the Band 5 category.
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