Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
People are two minded some people think fictional violnce portrayed on television is most harmless entertainment.But some people are disagree this word and thik it encourages violent behaviour.
Illustrated my honest ans are there people are overthinking the main part is this and television are a not harmless in entertinment because some time .People are bored and saw the new think and new news are coming the television but sometimes television are more important in human life.Time spent in the home. Somethings are wrong in the humans knowledge because people are full education but otherwise humans are not understand are this things. Not a violent in there behaviour.Humans are new technology use in television and happy with the look the different types of knowledge and understanding.And very peoples are mutured. Some time we thinking television are harmfull in student because student are not go to studey and every days look at the television and parents are so borrowing in out of days.And we suggest are some small children give distance in television and goes to study in home.Parents are so careless with childrens because parents are busy in the television and not be advice her children and some times television is more harmless entertainment.
Overall this things are good but i think both are good because some times are go and enjoy television and entertainment other thingd and some times main things are watch a television are limit and go to worked with your time is very full in the life.Not west your time watch television.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to address both views regarding television violence and provides a personal opinion, satisfying the basic prompt requirements. However, the ideas are severely under-developed, vague, and often tangential. Phrases like 'Illustrated my honest ans are there' and 'television are more important in human life' demonstrate that the arguments are disjointed and lack clear support or logical extension. The student's position is muddled and difficult to follow throughout the text, struggling to maintain a coherent line of argument. This places the response firmly within Band 4, as the task is addressed only minimally and ideas remain very limited and unclear.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The overall organisation of the essay is highly problematic. While there are paragraph breaks, the internal structure of these paragraphs lacks logical progression and clarity. Cohesive devices are either missing, repetitive, or used incorrectly, leading to jarring transitions between sentences and ideas. For instance, jumping from 'People are bored...' to 'television are more important in human life' creates severe coherence breaks. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it hard for the reader to follow the flow of information. The essay fails to arrange ideas coherently, matching the descriptors for Band 4.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used throughout the essay is basic, repetitive, and heavily restricted. The student frequently misuses words and collocations, such as 'two minded' instead of of two minds, 'harmless in entertinment', and 'mutured' instead of mature. Spelling errors are also common ('violnce', 'thik', 'studey', 'west'). These lexical limitations and frequent inaccuracies significantly strain the reader's ability to grasp the intended meaning easily. This performance aligns closely with Band 4 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying almost exclusively on simple and faulty sentence structures. There is a complete lack of control over basic syntax, evident in sentences like 'Some time we thinking television are harmfull in student because student are not go to studey'. Errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, articles, and word order are pervasive and frequent throughout the text. These persistent errors often distort meaning and cause significant difficulty for the reader, placing the grammar score at Band 4.
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