Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Few individuals believe that actors performed their violent characters on television are not a harmless activity while others argue that it is impact on the behaviour.
On one hand,fictional violence is useful for our youngsters because it assists us how to dealt with dangers in bad situation.These characters provide us free of cost entertainment and flexibility to learn the basic values of life.Moreover,when we feel loneliness it creats a sense of humour. In addition, we can sit together and make fun of each other.That is a quality of enjoyment. We can feel comfortable to watch their dramatic view and listen to background music.
On the other hand,here are some serious issues to watching their violence on portrayed screen.Firstly,childrens perform their character wit their younger brothers and the result shows they break their legs with the help of stick which they saw on television. Secondly, they want their needs of daily life from their parents without hesitation which do not know how to use it .For example,the boy commited a crime in Pakistan in the past five years and he confessed it,i did it after watching the film of violent characters. But now he is in cells.That type of character contribute to the crime.
In conclusion, Government should bane such types of characters on digital screem and to implement laws who perform it.Real fictional based characters shows the peace and nature of calmness in bad situations.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to discuss both views regarding fictional television violence and provides a personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the task is only partially addressed due to underdeveloped ideas and logical gaps. For instance, the argument that fictional violence is useful for youngsters because it teaches them how to deal with dangers is not clearly substantiated. Furthermore, the response is 15 words short of the 250-word minimum requirement, which negatively impacts the overall task achievement score. The position is stated, but the support lacks sufficient extension and clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and confusing statements. While basic cohesive devices such as 'On one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'Firstly' are used, referencing is often unclear, such as the ambiguous pronoun use in 'watching their violence'. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is faulty, making it sometimes difficult to follow the writer's line of thought.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently impeded by inaccurate word choice and collocation, such as 'actors performed their violent characters' and 'banish such types of characters on digital screem'. Less common vocabulary is attempted but often used incorrectly, like 'creats a sense of humour' instead of providing light relief. Spelling errors also occur, which restricts the lexical range to a minimally adequate level for the task.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but these attempts are frequently faulty and lead to frequent grammatical errors. Examples include tense confusion, missing articles, and awkward phrasing such as 'which do not know how to use it' and 'laws who perform it'. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are poorly controlled, resulting in frequent errors that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader.
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