Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Describe the statement the some people say that the fictional portrayed on the television is harmfull entertainment. And the to say disagree that the violent the behavior.

First of all the people say that the television the helpfull for the harmless entertainment. For example the people seen the television the darmas, watch movies and the othere thing. So the people the enjoy the shows and and watch the news and etc. And the helpfull for the humams.

Secondly some people to say that the television is not good for the harmless and the entertainment. For examples the student watching defferent games, videos, and the waste your time and donpot fouces on your study and always the time they wacting videos. So spme people not agree to seen the television. Just only fouces on your studies and they not watching videos.

On my opinion they on your free time the seen the videos and watching other activities because you can feel the relax and your mind is fresh and your fouce need to study. But they not to say you just watch the television you can fouce on your studies and the watching the videos seen on your free time only they you feel the refresh and relax on your mind.

And the some people say that only watching videos, games and etc and then the waste of your time . Than they can not prove your skills and only watching and the spend the time on television. And they can not successful in the future.

Overall the people say the television and waste your tim,e and change the behavior .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You make an attempt to discuss both views and give a personal opinion, particularly when you say television can help people relax in their free time. However, the response addresses the specific issue only minimally: the task concerns fictional violence and whether it encourages violent behaviour, while most of your examples discuss television, games, wasted time and studying. The view that fictional violence is harmless is not clearly explained, and the opposing view is presented mainly as a distraction from school rather than as an effect on behaviour. Your opinion is present but repetitive and not supported with a relevant example. To improve, explain each side directly—for instance, whether viewers can distinguish fiction from reality, or whether repeated exposure may influence aggressive actions—and develop your own position with a clear reason.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an opening, separate points, an opinion and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “First of all,” “Secondly” and “Overall” help signal movement between sections. However, ideas are not arranged coherently enough to build a clear discussion: the response shifts from harmless entertainment to study habits and then to future success, without showing how these points connect to fictional violence. Linking words are often repetitive, and references such as “they” and “the people” do not always make clear who is meant. Several sentences repeat the same idea about watching videos in free time. Plan one paragraph for each view and a final paragraph for your opinion, with each sentence developing the paragraph’s main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on words such as “people,” “television,” “watching,” “videos” and “time.” This limits your ability to express the central ideas precisely: terms related to fictional violence, audience influence or aggressive behaviour are largely absent. There are also frequent spelling and word-choice problems, including “harmfull,” “darmas,” “defferent,” “fouces” and “refresh,” which make parts of the response difficult to understand. Some phrases, such as “helpfull for the harmless entertainment,” do not communicate a clear meaning. Build a small set of accurate topic vocabulary and practise using it in complete phrases, such as “violent scenes,” “viewers,” “aggressive behaviour” and “a source of entertainment.” Check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response relies on very limited sentence patterns, and frequent errors sometimes distort meaning. Many clauses are incomplete or have unclear structure, as in “Describe the statement the some people say…” and “And the helpfull for the humams.” Articles, subject–verb relationships and verb forms are often inaccurate; for example, “the people seen the television” does not form a correct sentence, and “they not watching videos” lacks an appropriate auxiliary. There are also repeated problems with sentence boundaries and punctuation, including long strings joined by “and.” Practise writing clear subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one reason using “because” or “although.” Read each sentence aloud and check that it has a complete main clause and consistent verb forms.

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