Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The television industry has reshaped our daily lives. If you want to watch important news, or you simply want some entertainment, almost everything becomes available in your home if you own a television. Today we'll shed light on the topic of whether fictional violence potrayed on television is harmless or harmless for the audience. After presenting different views, i will also give my own opinion on this matter.

The people who think that fictional violence is harmless view it as nothing more than entertainment. They argue that anyone watching a particular show already knows what to expect. As almost all shows on television come with graphic warnings which are not only present at the start of the program but also during break intervals. Moreover, they also claim that violence shown on television can, on the contrary, reduce violence and crimes in real life. They say this because violence potrayed as a bad thing in a show can educate people about its bad leading consequences.

On the other hand, the people who argue that violence potrayed on television is harmful also provide some legit points. They say that humans have the tendancy to repeat the things they see, especially children. If someone watches a show about an antagonist causing violence, they may end up looking up to him, which may cause negative influence. Additionally, watching shows with gore and violence may effect someone mentally, causing lifetime trauma.

In my opinion limited fictional violence should be allowed on television as long as the character causing violence is presented in a negative light. If this is implemented, some shows depicting fictional violence, can become benefitial for the audience by equiping them with knowledge on how to protect themselves from violent individuals and also teach them about its bad consequences.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and give a clear personal position: you consider fictional violence potentially harmful, but support allowing it when it is limited and portrayed negatively. The examples about children imitating an antagonist and viewers learning about consequences are relevant to the question. This meets the core task well, while the discussion is not yet consistently developed: the claim that warnings make violence harmless is asserted rather than explained, and the point that violent programmes may reduce real-world crime needs a clearer example or reasoning. Your conclusion repeats your position and adds a possible benefit, but could more directly weigh the two views before reaching that judgement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a final paragraph stating your opinion. Signposting such as “On the other hand” makes the contrast easy to follow, and the ideas generally progress logically within each paragraph. Some linking is mechanical, however, particularly the repeated use of “They say” and “Moreover, they also claim.” The opening promise to present different views is also somewhat formulaic. In places, the relationship between ideas could be clearer—for example, the warning labels are introduced as support for harmlessness without explaining how they prevent harm. Use more precise referencing and connect each supporting point explicitly to the paragraph’s main claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for the topic, including terms such as “graphic warnings,” “antagonist,” “negative influence,” and “lifetime trauma.” These choices help communicate the main ideas, and the meaning remains clear. However, some wording is imprecise or informal for an academic essay: “legit points” is conversational, while “bad leading consequences” is awkward and unclear. There are also spelling errors, including “potrayed,” “tendancy,” “benefitial,” and “equiping,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for more natural collocations and precise topic vocabulary, such as describing the “potential consequences” of violence or its “psychological effects.” Proofreading spelling and word forms would make your vocabulary more controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex structures, including conditional clauses (“If someone watches a show…”) and a concession in your opinion (“as long as…”). Most sentences are understandable, and errors rarely prevent the reader from following your argument. Some sentence construction and punctuation need attention. “They argue that anyone watching a particular show already knows what to expect. As almost all shows…” leaves the second idea as a dependent fragment; join it to the preceding sentence or recast it. The opening “Today we'll shed light” shifts into an informal, conversational style, and “i” should be capitalised. There is also an unnecessary comma in “shows depicting fictional violence, can become.” More consistent control of sentence boundaries and punctuation would strengthen accuracy.

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