Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, television is an important part of our daily lives. some people believe that visual of fictional violence is harmless entertainment. While others argue that type of entertainment will be harmfull in our daily lifes because that change our thinking prespective. In my opinion, fictional violence portrayed have major negative impact on children and young in that modern era.

Firstly, fictional violence is harmful beacuse when our childern see that type of violence in daily life like in dramas or in movies after that they want to copy that violence beacause childern thinks that are normal thing. In addition, fictional violence have bad impact can cause fear and anxiety. Moreover, in pakistan drama industry fictional violence scenes are normal So, in daily life people think that are good method to solve any problem.

Secondly, fictional violence scenes on TV is harmless entertainment when people have knowledge that actors do acting that are not real also that type of violence scenes make movie storey more exciting and entertaining. In addition, most of people like action movies that's why through that violence they relex and enjoy free time. Moreover, most of the people differentiate between right and wrong, do not copy violence scenes for entertainment.

In conclusion, in any type movie without fictional violence that movie are not entertaining or beside from that we need comedy instead of fictional violence but that violence is harmful because that violence are not entertainment for any children. Although that should be entertaining with proper guidance from parents to childern how watching that type of fictional violence.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and give a clear opinion that fictional violence can negatively affect children and young people. The first body paragraph explains possible imitation and fear, while the second recognises that viewers may understand acting is not real and enjoy action films. These are relevant points, but the discussion is only partly developed: the claim that children copy violence and the reference to Pakistani dramas would be stronger with a specific example or clearer explanation. Your conclusion also introduces comedy and parental guidance without fully resolving how these ideas support your position. Develop each main point with a reasoned example and make your final judgement more direct.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the broad organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to track, and several ideas are joined mechanically with “In addition” and “Moreover.” For example, the first body paragraph moves from imitation to fear and then to Pakistani dramas without clearly showing how the points relate. Some references, such as “that type of violence” and “that violence,” are also unclear or repetitive. Use fewer repeated linkers, connect each supporting sentence explicitly to its main point, and organise the conclusion around your stated opinion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fictional violence,” “harmless entertainment,” “fear and anxiety,” and “differentiate between right and wrong.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main topic, but the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make parts less clear. Phrases such as “change our thinking prespective,” “copy that violence,” and “movie storey” are awkward or inaccurate, while “harmfull,” “childern,” and “beacuse” show inconsistent spelling. Aim to learn accurate topic collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions for effects, audience responses, and parental guidance would help you explain your ideas with greater clarity and flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “While others argue…” and a reason introduced by “because.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence formation, agreement, articles, and punctuation sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “fictional violence portrayed have major negative impact” lacks correct agreement and article use, while “when people have knowledge that actors do acting” is not formed accurately. The opening also begins a sentence with lowercase “some,” and several sentences run ideas together without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check agreement and sentence boundaries.

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