Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is thought by some people that watching a fictional violence entertainment has no side effects, while other people believe that it can motivate violent behavior.In my opinion, I believe that it can bring somehow a negative impact on the veiwers.

To begin with, It is thought by some that watching a fictional based movies and series on television is totally harmless and it is a kind of fun and entertainment. They beleive that fictional based violance is imaginary and just like a horror movies it does effect the veiwers mentally and emotionaly, Moreover they enjoy watching these kind of portrayed on television even some of them pay for the premium contents of fictional violence Movies.

In contrast, Other people belive that watching these kind of portrayed on televiosion has negative effects on the veiwers, Furthermore they think that the fictional violence can encourage the veiwers to behave violently in real life. In addition it is thought by them that a violent content can motivate the viewers to act exaclty the same, For instance , a crime based movies can push the viewers to do it in real life.

In my openion, I believe that a fictional violence portrayed on television can somehow effect those who watch it either mentally or emotionally. For instance , watching a movie or drama telling how to murder, kill or suicide tells the veiwers ways to find out, and if they face a problem in real life they can misbehave as they have learnt from portrayed.

To sum up, Some people believe that fictional based violance is totally harmless while other think it support violent behavior either mentally or emotionally and, I agree with them

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a position: the opening says fictional violence may have a negative impact, and the body contrasts the belief that it is harmless with the concern that it can encourage real-world violence. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The harmless-entertainment view is mainly described as imaginary and enjoyable, while the opposing view relies on a broad claim that crime films can push viewers to commit crimes. Your own opinion is present, but the example about learning ways to murder or commit suicide is asserted rather than explained or supported. Develop each side with a clearer reason and a specific, relevant example, and make your position more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, your opinion, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “To begin with,” “In contrast,” and “To sum up” help readers follow the basic organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and several linking expressions are repetitive or awkwardly placed, including repeated “Furthermore” and “In addition.” Some sentences join several ideas without clear relationships, particularly the paragraph beginning “In contrast.” References such as “these kind of portrayed” also make it difficult to identify exactly what is being discussed. Organise each paragraph around one main point, then explain and illustrate it, using linking words and references more precisely.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “fictional violence,” “violent behaviour,” “premium contents,” and “negative effects,” so the reader can understand the general subject. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, especially “viewers,” “fictional,” and “violence.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “beleive,” “violance,” “veiwers,” and “openion,” and some word combinations are unnatural, for example “a fictional violence entertainment” and “fictional based movies.” These choices sometimes make the meaning less clear. Build a more varied set of accurate expressions for discussing media influence, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the response uses basic structures to compare views and give examples. However, control is inconsistent, particularly in complex sentences. For example, “They believe that fictional based violence is imaginary and just like a horror movies it does effect the viewers mentally and emotionally” contains problems with sentence structure, articles, and agreement. Other examples include “a violent content can motivate” and “other think,” where agreement is inaccurate. Punctuation also causes difficulty: several sentences run together, and commas are misplaced or missing. Aim first for accurate, clearly separated sentences, then add complex clauses using reliable patterns such as “because” or “which.”

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