Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is sometimes argued that some people think fictional violence which is shown on television has no harmful affects on the audience while others have this perspective that it encourages violent behaviour. I acknowlege that it has some adverse affects but in my opinion, I think it creates a kind of lesson for its audience that negative actions have negative consequences.

Nowadays, television has become a mutual source of entertainment for both young and old generation. Dramas and TV programmes has a high influence on the minds of viewers because we learn a lot of good and bad things from different show. But one vital thing that we learn is that bad energy leads to bad actions that can result in severe downfall. For example, in most of the action stories, the protagonist is the positive character with positive actions and because of his actions, he wins in the end of story. While the antagonist, who is the villain or negative character faces downfall in the end because of his evil and devilish actions. So fictional violenece is harmless beacuse even with its harmfull scenes, it is still creating a kind of self realisation between what is good and what is bad.

On the other hand, fictional violence sometimes encourages violent behaviour because some viewers try to implement these actions in their real lives. For example, someone who is not mature enough watches fictional violence, he uses the same tricks of violence in real life which will result in some unpleasent outcome. In such cases it is pereceived that it encourages violence.

In conclusion, we can mitigate this violent behaviour which is learnt through fictional violence on televsion by promoting the difference between what is real and what is reel. So in my opinion fictional violence portrayed on televisions is harmless.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state a clear opinion: you acknowledge that television violence can encourage imitation, but conclude that it is generally harmless because it can show the consequences of wrongdoing. The examples about protagonists and antagonists, and about immature viewers copying violent actions, are relevant to the question. However, the first view receives more explanation than the opposing view, and the claim that fictional violence teaches a moral lesson is asserted rather than fully demonstrated. Your conclusion also introduces the idea of distinguishing “real” from “reel” without explaining how this would work. Develop each side more evenly and support your position with a specific, realistic example to make the argument more convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph supporting the harmless-entertainment view, a contrasting paragraph on imitation, and a conclusion. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the main stages. Within paragraphs, however, some connections are mechanical or unclear. The sequence from the protagonist’s success to the claim that violence creates “self realisation” does not clearly explain how violent scenes themselves teach this lesson. The opening also repeats the idea of “some people think,” and the final sentence does not fully connect the proposed solution to your opinion. Use clearer cause-and-effect links and make each paragraph’s central point explicit before adding its example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “fictional violence,” “violent behaviour,” “protagonist,” “antagonist,” and “consequences.” These choices show an attempt to discuss the issue beyond basic vocabulary. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “mutual source of entertainment,” “bad energy,” and “self realisation between what is good and what is bad.” Spelling errors, including “acknowlege,” “harmfull,” and “televsion,” also reduce the accuracy of the vocabulary. Aim for precise, natural expressions and check spelling carefully; for example, describe television as a “common form of entertainment” and say that viewers “distinguish between right and wrong.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “because,” “while,” and “which,” and your meaning is generally understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with subject–verb agreement and sentence construction. For example, “Dramas and TV programmes has” should use a plural verb, and “someone who is not mature enough watches fictional violence, he uses” joins two clauses incorrectly. The opening sentence is also awkwardly structured, while “in the end of story” needs an article. Review agreement, articles, and how to connect clauses; using a full stop or a conjunction in the imitation example would make the relationship between the viewer’s age and behaviour clearer.

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