Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There is an ongoing debate about that various people believe that the fictional violence displayed on television is not harmful and just for entertainment. However, people opposing this point of view state that it encourages violent behaviour. I strongly believe that violence portrayed on television is not harmful, but it promotes violent behaviour between people.

On the one hand, people who support this point of view explain that violence is just limited to television and not promoted in real life. It is just for entertainment and nothing more. They believe that people watch movies for fun and to escape from reality. They know the difference between reality and the fictional world.

On the other hand, people who disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour argue that even some people knows the difference between fictional and real world, Most of them tend to forget that because of what kind of violence is potrayed on television. They think it is cool in real life also to do all those things. Children also watch television often and they do not able to create a understanding between fictional and entertainement world and enjoys doing what is potrayed on televsion. Reports shows that children who mostly watch violent content have more chances to become an agressive adult. In my opinion, I believe it is so true that violence on television takes a toll on a person's mind and character in future.

In conclusion, we have discussed both the points how people who supports fictional violence believes it doesn't effect a real person's mental health or anything but other who argues clearly state with reports that it is shown in data how people who grew up watching violence on television became agressive adults. So, it clearly outweighs the first opinion.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and give a position, but the stance is not fully consistent: the introduction says television violence is “not harmful, but it promotes violent behaviour,” which appears to support both opposing claims. The body explains the entertainment argument and then develops the concern about children, including a claim about later aggression. However, the first view is only briefly explained, and the evidence for the second is general (“Reports shows”) rather than supported with a specific example or explanation. The conclusion repeats the contrast and says the second view outweighs the first, helping clarify your final position. To strengthen the response, state your position precisely from the outset and develop each side with clearer reasoning and relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs beginning “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This makes the overall arrangement coherent and helps readers follow the two views. Some connections, however, are mechanical or unclear. For example, “people who support this point of view” has an uncertain reference, and the long sentence beginning “even some people knows” combines several ideas without clear punctuation or progression. The conclusion also repeats much of the previous paragraph rather than drawing the argument together. Use clearer references, divide complex points into shorter sentences, and connect each claim to its explanation so cohesion feels less repetitive.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “fictional violence,” “violent behaviour,” “escape from reality,” and “aggressive adult.” This gives the response enough topic-specific language to communicate its main ideas. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive, especially repeated references to “television” and “violent behaviour.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, such as “potrayed,” “entertainement,” “televsion,” and “takes a toll on a person's mind and character in future.” Some phrases are imprecise, including “create a understanding” and “what kind of violence is portrayed.” Build a wider set of accurate collocations and check spelling and word forms to make the argument clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, using structures such as “They believe that people watch movies for fun and to escape from reality” and a contrast introduced by “On the other hand.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some points harder to follow. Examples include “people who supports,” “some people knows,” “they do not able to create,” and “Reports shows,” where subject–verb agreement or verb forms are incorrect. The sentence beginning “even some people knows” also has a comma splice and an unnecessary capital letter after the comma. Practise agreement, auxiliary verbs, articles, and sentence boundaries; then proofread each sentence for a complete and correctly formed verb phrase.

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