Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Different people give different views about fictional violance in movies .But some people think that it does not create any problem in our society and other peoplr think that it is damanging for tha children and others peoples.

Firstly ,some people think it does not create any problem,i agree with them ..because such kinds if dramas are not related to real life It iis completely different fron the msseries of life .The violence in these fictionalmovies are totally differnt so a person who understand these things not relate such to the of violence to real life .we should to understand the differnce these things.

the other view of icture is that ,it affect on some praple ,mostly childrens .Children whose watch such kind of movies try to act like them.theyn have no sence aout these things .

One of my czn who likes most violence movies .he saw such kind of movies on daily basis And one day ,he was fighting wit his sister and act like the heroes of movies that he iffenly watch in tv cerials . Her sister got serious injury by this little fight .When his father asked that why you do this he simply said that he try to learn cratas and other fighting that he watch in movies .

this is the moment that everyone was shocked and realized tha adverse effect of these fictional movies ..

we cannot neglect any pros and cons of any picture .Because every picture has two views.In my opinion,parents should to keep an eye on tier children .Because aperson who understand these things never compare his life with dramatical things but we should try to teach others that understand the real miseries of life .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views: the first paragraph of argument says fictional violence is separate from real life, while the example about your cousin illustrates how children may imitate what they watch. You also give a practical opinion that parents should monitor children. However, the discussion is uneven: the view that such entertainment is harmless receives only a brief explanation, and your final position is not fully consistent, since you first agree with that view but later emphasise harmful effects. Develop both sides more clearly and state whether you believe fictional violence is generally harmless, harmful, or dependent on the viewer. Explain the example’s relevance and connect it directly to your conclusion so the response answers the whole question more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a recognisable overall structure: you introduce the two views, discuss each in turn, give a personal example, and finish with a recommendation. The cousin’s story also provides a concrete link to your point about children copying screen behaviour. However, progression is sometimes difficult to follow because ideas are joined with repetitive or awkward transitions such as “Firstly,” “the other view,” and “Because.” Several sentences run together, and references such as “these things” and “this is the moment” are not always precise. Use separate, clearly focused paragraphs for the introduction, each view, and the conclusion. Add linking phrases that show contrast and cause, and make sure each pronoun clearly refers to a specific idea or person.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “fictional,” “violence,” “adverse effect,” and “real life,” and the personal example helps communicate your meaning. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “such kind of movies” and “these things.” Frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices—such as “violance,” “damanging,” “praple,” and “miseries of life”—make parts of the response difficult to understand. Some expressions are also unnatural, for example “keep an eye on their children” is understandable but less formal than “monitor their children’s viewing.” Build a bank of accurate topic collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, including a conditional idea about viewers who understand the difference between fiction and reality, and you use past-tense narration in the cousin’s story. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors are frequent enough to make some sentences hard to follow. Examples include “Children whose watch,” “we should to understand,” and “parents should to keep,” where clause structure or verb patterns are incorrect. There are also problems with agreement and sentence boundaries, as in “The violence … are,” and several sentences are joined without appropriate punctuation. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses using correct verb forms and punctuation.

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