Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often argued that action scene from television program is inoffensive entertainment, while other believe that it is responsible for violent behaviour in humans. I believe that it is totally depends on a perspective of a person who is watching. This essay will discuss both the views and opinion in following paragraphs.

One of the main reason is adults understand the all the fighting scene are just a part of their script. Even when the program start their is a desclaimer, all the stunts are performed under expert's supervision and it is only for entertainment purpose. For instance, for any movie or a television program their are fighting scenes, but in corner of that screen warning is written. So, it is totally depends on the individuals perspective either it is harmful or harmless.

On other hand many individuals believe that it encourages violent behaviour because, by watching fighting scenes many youngster get influence by them and they want to do the same things in real life. As a result, the studies say that many crimes in the cities are commited by youngster and also it is inspired by action movies. Parent should have a control on there kids what type of content they are watching. I believe that it is totally depends on mindset or perspective of individual that what type of content we are watching or we should watch only for entertainment purpose. For youngsters parents should explain them about the fictional violence so they also watch it for entertainment.

In conclusion, while it is true fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment , despite we also have to take care of youngster who get inspired by action movies.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a personal position: you argue that the effect depends on the viewer, then explain that young people may imitate violence. However, the position is not consistently clear. The opening says the effect depends on perspective, while the conclusion calls fictional violence harmless but also warns about its influence. The discussion is relevant, but the harmless-entertainment view relies mainly on adults recognising that scenes are scripted and on screen warnings; the opposing view makes a broad claim about crime without explaining or supporting it. Develop each side with a clearer reason or example, and state your own judgement consistently. The response contains 274 words; 8 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Linking phrases such as “For instance,” “On other hand,” and “As a result” help signal examples and contrast. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the second body paragraph moves from imitation to crime, parental control, and your opinion without clearly connecting these points. The repeated claim that the effect “depends on” the individual also makes the argument feel circular. Some linking is mechanical or inaccurate, and references such as “it” and “they” are not always immediately clear. Organise each paragraph around one main point and use transitions that show the precise relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “fictional violence,” “violent behaviour,” “fighting scenes,” and “entertainment purpose,” so the main ideas are generally understandable. There is some attempt to use more specific language, such as “expert’s supervision” and “inspired by action movies.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive: “action scene from television program,” “get influence by them,” and “a control on there kids” do not sound natural. Spelling errors such as “desclaimer,” “commited,” and “youngster” (where a plural is intended) also reduce accuracy. Build a wider set of natural phrases for discussing media influence, imitation, and audience age, and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a conditional structure in “if it is harmful or harmless” and a reason clause beginning “because.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in basic sentence patterns and agreement occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “it is totally depends,” “One of the main reason,” “the program start,” and “Parent should have a control.” There are also problems with articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries, as in “all the fighting scene are just a part of their script.” The final sentence beginning “while it is true” is not completed with a clear contrast. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and article use, then proofread each sentence for a complete, logically connected structure.

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