Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often argued that violence often showed on television has no negative effect on the viewers. Some people disagree with this notion and state that it can influence the watcher and encourage violence. I largely agree with the statement that violence portrayed on television can have negative influence on individuals and it can hype violent actions.

On the one hand, fictional violence showed on screens is harmless particularly for the literate individuals and it has no effect on them. This is due to the fact that these people are sensible and they do not get influenced by ceratin violence entertainments. Moreover, some people cannot relate their lives with such violent content so it generally has no influence on them.

On the other hand, watching violence on television can badly effect the behaviour of individuals and specifically it can influence illiterate individuals who have no access to a positive envoirment and their lives revolve around negativity. Another significant reason for violence portrayed on screens having negative effect on individuals can be that many people can relate such programs or content to their personal life and get influenced immidiately. Furthermore, this violent behaviours can normally be expected from individuals with no civic sense and sensible actions. For example, in the backward areas of Pakistan many citizens get influenced by fictional violence portrayed on television and they may harm people near them relating their life with certain programs showed on TV.

It is obvious that many people living in rural areas can be encouraged for doing violence because they have no access to a healthy positive lifestyle and they related their life to characters portrayed on television.

To conclude, violence showed in many entertainment programs can influence only a particular part of society; thus, it depends on the personal suuroundings of the consumer. Admittedly, violence can have no negative effect on viewers however, it can particularly influence people who relate their life with such fictional violent characters portrayed on TV.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state a clear position: you “largely agree” that televised violence can have negative effects. The response also gives reasons for each side, including the idea that some viewers distinguish fiction from real life and that others may identify with violent characters. The Pakistan example adds relevant support. However, the harmless-entertainment view is developed only briefly, and the claim that literate people are less affected is asserted rather than explained or supported. The discussion of viewers in rural or “backward” areas is repeated and generalised, so the causes and effects are not fully clarified. To strengthen the response, develop each side with a specific explanation or example and make the conclusion follow from that balanced discussion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The essay has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help signal the contrast, and the main position is easy to identify. However, progression within the second viewpoint is less controlled: the ideas about illiteracy, negative surroundings, personal identification, and civic sense are placed together without clear links showing how one leads to another. The final paragraph repeats the point about rural viewers and relating to television characters rather than adding a distinct concluding insight. Some linking phrases, such as “Another significant reason” and “Furthermore,” make the organisation feel mechanical. Group related causes and effects, then use clearer referencing and avoid repeating the same claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “fictional violence,” “influence,” “portrayed,” and “personal life,” which makes the subject clear. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “significant reason” and “particular part of society.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “violence showed on screens,” “badly effect,” and “hype violent actions” do not express the intended meaning naturally. Spelling errors such as “ceratin,” “envoirment,” and “immidiately” also reduce accuracy. Repetition of “influence,” “violence,” and “individuals” limits flexibility. Build precision by learning common collocations for media effects and varying repeated terms only when the meaning remains exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “because,” “so,” and “that,” and the overall meaning is generally understandable. Some sentences are controlled, such as “Some people disagree with this notion and state that it can influence the watcher.” However, there are grammatical errors in several patterns. For example, “violence portrayed on television can have negative influence” needs an article before “negative influence,” while “many people living in rural areas can be encouraged for doing violence” uses an incorrect verb pattern. In “they related their life,” the tense does not fit the general claim, and “this violent behaviours” has a number-agreement problem. Review articles, verb patterns, tense consistency, and singular/plural agreement, then proofread punctuation and sentence boundaries.

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