Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

It recent years, it is getting popular among the people that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment which others diasgree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.This essay will address both of these aspects.

In response to the first questions, i believe that it does some changes in the personal behaviour about the perspective of them. The fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment but in some point it affect the people thought about the others. For instance, if a teenegers is watching a movie on TV about the voilence among the couples they might think that their parents might fight with each other.

Turning to the second question it is clear that

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response introduces the topic and begins to discuss how fictional violence might affect viewers, with the example of a teenager interpreting violence between couples as something that could happen between their parents. However, it does not adequately discuss both views: the claim that such programmes are harmless entertainment is not explained, and the opposing view is left unfinished after “Turning to the second question it is clear that”. Your own position is also unclear; “i believe that it does some changes” does not establish a clear, consistent opinion. The response contains 98 words, below the required 250; 19 words copied from the prompt were excluded from that count. Develop both sides, state your view directly, and support each main point with a relevant explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening introduces the topic, and “In response to the first questions” and “Turning to the second question” signal a move between points. These markers show awareness of the task’s two sides. However, the second section stops mid-sentence, so there is no completed progression or conclusion, and the first body paragraph does not clearly separate the harmless-entertainment view from the possible effects of violence. The link between the example about a teenager and the preceding claim is also not fully explained. Use a clear introduction, one developed paragraph for each view, and a concluding paragraph; connect each example explicitly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “fictional violence,” “harmless entertainment,” “violent behaviour,” and “personal behaviour,” so the reader can identify the subject. There are also attempts to express ideas such as how television may affect viewers’ perceptions. However, the range is narrow, and several inaccurate or awkward choices make meaning less precise: “it does some changes” and “the perspective of them” are unclear, while “the first questions” is not a natural phrase in this context. Spelling errors such as “diasgree,” “teenegers,” and “voilence” also weaken control. Build a wider set of accurate terms for effects and viewpoints, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple and more extended sentence forms, for example, “The fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment but in some point it affect the people thought about the others.” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Errors include the opening “It recent years,” the agreement and verb-form problems in “it affect,” and the incomplete construction “if a teenegers is watching … they might think.” Capitalisation is also inconsistent, as in “i.” The final sentence beginning “Turning to the second question” is unfinished, leaving its structure incomplete. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, pronoun agreement, and complete sentence construction, then proofread punctuation and capitalisation.

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