Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

While some argue that fictional violence portrayed on television could be harmless, rest argue that it motivates violent behaviour within the viewers. In this essay, we will examine both perspectives and explore why I consider fictional violence to be harmful to the viewers.

On the one hand, proponents of the idea that says imagined violence displayed on television is harmless rightly point out that the viewers consider programmes such as movies, tv series merely hypothetical and unrealistic to the real world. Therefore, they won't either try to perform or expect such actions in similar real world scenarios. For instance, the supporters of the argument argue that though a character in a movie kills a policeman and escape without a trace, the viewers will never try such thing in reality as they know it is merely impossible.

While this argument holds merit, it fails to account for the variations of mentality of the viewers. Although a majority of viewers are expected to be calm after the show, people with mental disorders and underaged groups are tend to perform such violent actions. Moreover, the violence, even though it's fictional, might be so realistic and convincing which motivates the viewers to try out in real situation. Serial killer movies can be considered as perfect example for this. Some serial killer movies such as Scream movie series compel it viewers to get revenge from their bullies by murdering them violently.

In conclusion, while it may seems the fictional violence telecasted on television harmless, the variety of the audience and realistic picturing could make detrimental effects on its viewers. Thus, I believe that the violence, fictional or not, would be harmful for its audience.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and state a clear opinion: the introduction says you consider fictional violence harmful, and the conclusion maintains that position. The harmless-entertainment view is supported with a relevant example of viewers recognising a film killing as unrealistic. You also explain why some viewers may be more vulnerable and refer to realistic portrayals and revenge. This covers the task well, but the supporting ideas are unevenly developed: the claim about people with mental disorders and underage viewers is asserted rather than explained, and the Scream example would be stronger with a specific link to how viewing leads to behaviour. To strengthen the response, qualify broad claims and develop the causal reasoning behind your examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two perspectives, and a conclusion that restates your view. The progression from the harmlessness argument to its limitations is easy to follow, and signposts such as “On the one hand,” “While this argument holds merit,” and “In conclusion” help guide the reader. This is a strong, logical arrangement. At times, however, the links between claims could be more explicit: the move from vulnerable audiences to realistic portrayals introduces two related but distinct reasons without clearly showing how each supports your position. Use topic sentences and more precise referencing to make those relationships clearer, while avoiding reliance on formulaic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for the topic, including “fictional violence,” “hypothetical,” “realistic and convincing,” and “detrimental effects.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and some less common vocabulary shows an attempt to discuss the issue precisely. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “motivates violent behaviour within the viewers,” “variations of mentality,” and “perfect example.” “Telecasted” is also an unnatural choice in this context. These slips do not prevent understanding, but they limit precision and naturalness. Aim for established collocations and more exact phrasing, for example, describing violence as “encouraging viewers to imitate aggressive behaviour” rather than saying it motivates behaviour “within” them.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including concession clauses (“Although a majority of viewers…”) and a conditional-style explanation (“as they know it is merely impossible”). The overall meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors recur. Examples include “the viewers consider programmes … merely hypothetical” (missing “to be”), “people with mental disorders and underaged groups are tend to perform” (incorrect verb construction), and “it may seems” (incorrect verb form). There are also agreement and article problems in “compel it viewers” and “as perfect example.” These errors show that complex ideas are being attempted, but control is not yet consistent. Check subject–verb agreement, verb patterns after “tend,” and articles when editing.

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