Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is often argued by some people that action movies that are being telecaste on television are just for entartainment purposes, and they do not affect people thoughts. However, some people disagree with it and argued that it causes aggigated behaviours in people while I believe that people fictional violence and action movies are beneficial because they not only enforce bravery and confidence. But also honest in children and adults.

There are many benefits associated with violence and action movies. Firstly, they reinforce public to be brave in difficult situations either you face hardships and violence. As the bravery can be a trait of people but some people hesitates to take stance for themselves, even when they are right. These movies promote their habit so that they can speak for themselves. A good example of this is an action movie Flash a brave 18 year boy, released by USA in 2010 has fictional violence, but a man helping others while he being struck by lightening storm. He kill the villians, murderer or robbers to save people's life. Thus, action movies portrayed on television are good for people.

Secondly, confidence plays a major role in people life. The benefits of watching movies increase confidence. As people changes their lifestyle by inspiring from heroes in movies that portrays hero has both bad and good habits, but he transformed to a good person.For instance, A survey conducted in Germany showed that people who watch movies were more confident and groomed personalities. Hence, confidence of people improves by watching entertainment movies.

Finally, some people argued that these genre of movies increases aggression and impulsive behaviours.

As characters in plays, movies, and animies promoting . Children takes example from there surroundings, receives information from enviroment and television. The TV play that people watches always show that honesty is best policy, always speak truth and being honest will make you hero.

To some up, I believe that people should watch action movies, the advantages of violence portrayed outweigh its disadvantages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear preference for the view that fictional action violence can be beneficial, and you offer reasons involving bravery and confidence. However, the task asks you to discuss both views, and the opposing argument is only briefly introduced near the end; it is not explained or supported in enough detail. The claim that children copy what they see could form a relevant counterargument, but the paragraph then shifts to honesty and positive messages rather than showing how fictional violence might encourage aggression. Examples such as the film “Flash” and the survey in Germany are included, but their relevance and reliability are not explained. Develop both perspectives more evenly and make your position consistent and explicit throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, separate paragraphs for benefits, a paragraph that begins to address the opposing view, and a conclusion. This gives it some basic organisation. However, progression is difficult to follow because the discussion of aggression is short and then moves to honesty, which does not clearly support the opposing view. Linking phrases such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Finally” help signal sequence, but connections between ideas are often unclear; for example, “As the bravery can be a trait…” does not clearly explain the preceding claim. The conclusion also repeats the preference without resolving the two views. Use each paragraph for one clearly developed point, and connect examples directly to the claim they support.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “fictional violence,” “aggression,” “impulsive behaviours,” and “confidence,” and you attempt to express ideas beyond very basic statements. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts difficult to understand. For example, “enforce bravery,” “aggigated behaviours,” and “groomed personalities” do not express the intended meanings naturally. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “telecaste,” “entartainment,” “villians,” and “enviroment.” These issues sometimes obscure your meaning. Build a more accurate set of phrases for discussing media effects, and check spelling and collocations carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “because,” “while,” and “so that.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences hard to follow. Examples include “they do not affect people thoughts,” “people who watch movies were more confident,” and “Children takes example from there surroundings.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation also cause problems: the opening paragraph contains a fragment beginning “But also,” and “A good example of this is…” runs into several clauses without clear control. Practise subject–verb agreement, possessives, articles, and complete sentence construction. Aim first for accurate, clear sentences, then add complexity.

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