Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Now a days, individuals believe that the fictional violence show is for entertainment when others people think that it is totally effect on human behaviour and their future. In my opinion, it is for entertainment only but some people use to their life and it effect on their behaviour make change their life and start small crimes like pick pockets, drug supply. I will discuss my viewpoints in upcoming paragraphs.

To commence with, why people think that it effect in people it is harmfull for humans the main reason is it can effect on human future. To explain it, people watch programme and learn how to start small crimes like pickpockets and drug supply. It tolly harm to their health with distinct ways.Secondly, people make distance with their family and donot talk woith their friends and relatives it totally effect on their mental and physical health due to this people donot talk with others in any ways and focus on their mobile phone .

Nevertheless, some people think that is only for entertainment due to bacause these programms are make with the help of artificial intelligence and it is very funny to watch and refresh their moods and recharge their battteries.Lastly, due to this people sit with their family member and discuss about their school routine and it is a best way to talk with their parents and share all secreats.

To conclude, i would like to retrate my viewpoint why people think it is for entertainment due to fuuny clips and learn life lesson some people believe it is harmful people learn bad things and make distance with family member.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and give a personal position: you say fictional violence is mainly entertainment, while acknowledging that some viewers may imitate crimes. This is relevant to the question, but the discussion is only partial and the position becomes difficult to follow in places. For example, the claim that programmes are made with artificial intelligence does not explain why they are harmless entertainment, and the conclusion combines “funny clips” with learning life lessons without clearly weighing the two views. The examples of pickpocketing and drug supply are relevant but asserted rather than explained or supported. Develop each side with a clear reason and a specific example, then state your opinion consistently and explain why you hold it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion, so there is some basic organisation. However, the progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph moves from crime imitation to family relationships and phone use without showing how these points connect. Linking phrases such as “To commence with,” “Secondly,” and “Nevertheless” signal stages, but they are sometimes mechanical or do not clarify the relationship between ideas. The conclusion also repeats earlier claims rather than bringing them together. Improve the progression by giving each paragraph one central point, explaining it, and then linking it explicitly to the question. Use pronouns and references carefully so readers can tell what “it” and “this” refer to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “fictional violence,” “violent behaviour,” “entertainment,” and “mental and physical health,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, sometimes making meaning harder to understand. Phrases such as “effect on human behaviour,” “refresh their moods,” and “recharge their batteries” are not used naturally in context; repeated references to “people” and “effect” also limit precision. Spelling errors such as “harmfull,” “tolly,” and “secreats” further reduce clarity. Build a more precise set of expressions for discussing media influence, imitation, and relaxation, and check spelling and word forms during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “when,” “because,” and “due to,” but complex structures are often faulty and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For instance, “it is totally effect on human behaviour” lacks a correct verb pattern, while “people watch programme and learn how to start” has problems with articles and agreement. The sentence beginning “To explain it” also contains unclear clause structure, and punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after full stops. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly formed supporting clause, then check subject–verb agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries.

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