Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Fictional violence portayed on television is usually harmless and is done just for entertainment purposes only, but some people do get involved too much or get fascinated by the action showed leading to violent behaviour.

Those people that think it encourages violent behaviour can be correct to some degree because we have seen many stories of people imitating their favourite villain or character to such an extent that they have been involved in crime and later faced criminal charges, many serial killer movies or brutal action movies contain violence and some people get fascinated by the way they do things and start copying them, for example in tv show called dexter a serial killer tries to kill other serial killers, which he thinks is justice because he is killing bad people and people who do bad things being a vigilante, not knowing that killing is also bad because he likes to kill and if he is killing he might as well kill the bad people, this idea led a young boy in real life get to jail because he killed someone who was trying to rape girls and he thought he did the right by killing him,so main point is people do get encouraged but its a small population and mainly those people that are already suffering from mental issues.

I personally believe that movies or tv shows are just for entertainment and people should watch it in their free time with their family or alone to enjoy themselves that what cinema is about, me and my brother whenever we watch a movie which has fictional violence or is brutal we usually laugh at the way its being potrayed and take it in a form of humour and optimism and to just enjoy ourselves because we get stressed by everyday tasks and these movies and tv shows sure get you out of boredom.

in conclusion we should not get too much invested or fascinated by character or the violence being potrayed to such an extent that it affects our way of thinking or how we handle ourselves, it should always be watched for entertainment purposes only.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and give a clear personal position: you acknowledge that some viewers may imitate violent characters, while arguing that television is generally entertainment. The Dexter example gives the discussion a relevant, specific illustration. However, the two sides are not developed evenly. The argument that violence is harmless relies mainly on your experience of watching films with your brother and the general claim that they relieve boredom; explain more broadly why fictional content does not usually translate into real behaviour. The opposing view also needs a clearer explanation of how imitation occurs, and the example about a boy is difficult to assess because its source and circumstances are not explained. A more balanced discussion with carefully explained evidence would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on possible harmful effects, a paragraph presenting your own view, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the main direction of your argument. However, the first body paragraph is extremely long and contains several ideas in one sentence, so the example and your explanation become difficult to track. The transition from the opposing view to your own position is clear, but links within paragraphs rely heavily on repeated forms such as “and” and “because.” Divide the long paragraph into smaller units, give each paragraph one main purpose, and use referencing and linking phrases more precisely. This would improve progression and reduce the occasional mechanical feel.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “imitating,” “villain,” “serial killer,” “vigilante,” and “criminal charges,” which helps convey the subject matter. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “fascinated by the action” and “affects our way of thinking.” However, the range is limited by repeated general words and phrases, especially “people,” “bad,” “kill,” “entertainment,” and “violent behaviour.” Some expressions are imprecise or awkward, such as “the action showed” and “get involved too much,” and spelling errors such as “portayed” and “potrayed” are noticeable. Aim for more precise collocations and vary repeated vocabulary while keeping the meaning clear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “because” and “which,” and the main ideas are generally understandable. However, complex sentences are often poorly controlled, particularly in the long sentence beginning “Those people that think…”; it contains several clauses joined without clear boundaries, making the relationships between ideas hard to follow. There are also recurring errors in sentence boundaries and punctuation, such as the run-on after “bad people” and the missing space after “him,” as well as errors in verb patterns, for example “led a young boy in real life get to jail.” Articles and sentence construction are also inconsistent. Use shorter sentences to control clause structure, and check verb forms, articles, and punctuation carefully.

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