Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many people think that showing fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. While the others disagree and they think that its a encourages violent behaviour. In my opinion disagree with the people who things that it is just an harmless entertainment.

People who thing that the fictional violence portrayed is harmless entertainment. This may be beacause they have been growing up waching these types of television showes or even movies. As a result, they may find it funny, entertainment and even harmless. Futhermore, as a kid they may may not let these types of television show influvence them. Which may not be true when it comes to other kids or young people as they may get influvence and may harm other kids.

However, for the people who thing it's an encourages violent behaviour. This may be because as a kid their parents may have tought them that violence is not an entertainment and may even couse harm to other people. Moreover, while growing up they may had to faces people who use to wach fictional violence portrayed and was influvences by it. In addition, the people may thing that fictional violence portrayed on television may influvence kids easlly. As a rusult thay may act on what they see on the television and that can lead to they harming other kids in school or even the playground.

In conclution, i disagree with the people who things that waching fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. This is because it can be harmfull for the kids mind and they may act on them with out knowing if it is right or wrong.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and state your own position, particularly in the opening and conclusion, where you disagree that televised fictional violence is harmless. The response also gives relevant reasons: some viewers may see it as entertainment because they grew up watching it, while children may imitate what they see. However, the discussion remains limited and under-developed. The first view is explained mainly through viewers’ familiarity, rather than showing why fictional violence might be harmless; the opposing view relies on a general claim about children copying behaviour. Add a specific example and explain the link between viewing and behaviour more carefully. Your position is present, but it could be expressed more clearly and consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the main sections of your discussion. You also use linking expressions such as “As a result,” “However,” and “Moreover.” However, progression within paragraphs is often repetitive, with several ideas joined through repeated “may” statements rather than developed in a clear sequence. Some connections are unclear, for example, “Which may not be true when it comes to other kids,” where the reference is difficult to follow. The conclusion repeats the opening position without adding a clear synthesis. Organise each body paragraph around one main point, then explain and illustrate it, using references and transitions more precisely.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “fictional violence,” “violent behaviour,” “influences,” and “harm.” However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated frequently, especially “may,” “think,” and “television.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as “waching,” “showes,” “influvence,” and “harmless entertainment” used repeatedly without variation. Some expressions are awkward, including “act on what they see” and “harmfull for the kids mind.” These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the general argument, but they reduce precision and sometimes make the meaning less natural. Build a wider set of accurate phrases for describing imitation, media effects, and potential harm.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some complex sentences, using clauses introduced by “while,” “because,” and “as a result,” but control is inconsistent and the range of sentence structures is limited. Frequent errors include missing or incorrect verb forms and sentence construction: “In my opinion disagree” lacks a complete clause, while “they may had to faces” has an incorrect modal construction and verb form. There are also problems with articles and agreement, as in “an encourages violent behaviour,” and with clause boundaries, such as the fragment “Which may not be true when it comes to other kids.” These errors sometimes make the reader pause to interpret your meaning. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them into complex sentences with correct subjects, verbs, and punctuation.

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