Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The tables provides information about the total number of fatal, serious and slight injuries due to gun and knife crime and also the percentage increase for each degree of injury in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 .

Overall, the injuries experienced a substantial growth with the factor slight injuries, which was the most common injury between the individuals. The fatal injuries remained at the lowest factor overall the period. Whereas there was a slight fluctuation in the proportions of serious injuries.

Between 1998 to 1999, the slight injuries accounted for 653 numbers, the dominant factor among all of these, following with the serious injuries stood at 162 and fatal with 49 injuries. There was a rapid increase in the proportions, slight injuries with 390, serious with 392 and fatal made up the 95 number of injuries, until the start of 2002. All of the proportions remained increasing except fatal injuries with 80 numbers at the start od 2002.

At the end of 2007, all of the factors experienced rapid growth with the slight one stood at 3296 with 405% increase with respect to former. The factor serious injuries also faced a dramatic raise of 476 number with the percentage of 194 following with the fatal injuries whose proportion raise with 18%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad pattern that slight injuries were most numerous and fatal injuries least numerous, and you include the percentage increases. However, several details are inaccurate or unclear: the rise to 2002 is described as “slight injuries with 390,” although the table gives 1,390 for 2001–02, and the later figures of 3,296 and 476 are assigned to the wrong categories (3,296 is slight injuries in 2005–06; 476 is serious injuries). The table also has no complete figures for 2006–07, so “at the end of 2007” is misleading. The overview is relevant, but the response does not clearly summarise the overall total’s sharp rise or distinguish the periods accurately. Select key comparisons and report them precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview and two paragraphs of detail. This gives the reader a coherent overall arrangement, and phrases such as “Overall” and “Between 1998 to 1999” signal movement through the data. However, progression within the detail is sometimes difficult to follow. The sentence beginning “There was a rapid increase” combines several categories and years without making clear which figures belong to which period; “until the start of 2002” adds further ambiguity. The final paragraph also jumps to the end of the period without explaining the intervening trend. Use one paragraph to compare early figures and another for later changes, with clear year labels and references. Avoid linking phrases such as “following with” when a direct comparison would be clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” “percentage increase” and “fluctuation,” so the topic is generally understandable. There are also attempts at more formal wording, such as “substantial growth” and “dramatic raise.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing statistics: “factor” is repeatedly used for injury categories, “accounted for 653 numbers” is awkward, and “the proportions” does not accurately describe the counts. “Raise” is also not the appropriate noun here, and “former” is unclear in “with respect to former.” These word-choice and collocation problems sometimes make the data harder to interpret. Prefer precise terms such as “number,” “category,” “rose,” and “compared with the initial figure.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “Whereas” and a time clause beginning “Between 1998 to 1999.” However, some sentence structures are incomplete or awkward, and errors in agreement and grammatical patterns recur. For example, “The tables provides” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “Between 1998 to 1999” uses an incorrect preposition pattern. “Whereas there was a slight fluctuation…” is a fragment when separated from the preceding sentence, and “the slight one stood at 3296” lacks a clear grammatical reference. There are also tense and article problems in phrases such as “the factor serious injuries.” Aim for complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles and prepositions when revising.

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