Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given table represents the number of people that were injured due to gun and knife in Great Britain from the year 1998 to 2007 and also an increase was also noted over the period.

The table shows all the data that was collected during those years where we can see that the highest number of people that were injured slightly due to gun or knife that the highest number that was for about 3821, In the year 1998 the level of injuries were noted very less than compared to other following years till 2007 and the highest was seen in 2007 with 3821 including the fatal ones, serious and slightly injured ones.

The percentage of Fatal ones were increased by 18% from the year 2005 to 2007, The seriously injured were 194 percent in those same years and the slightly injured ones were 405 in the same years, So overall the percentage was increased in a very drastic manner with about all the 342 total number of people being injured.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the table’s subject and mention the overall rise, but the main features are not reported accurately or clearly enough. The figure of 3,821 is the total for 2005–06, not the number of slight injuries, and it is not a 2007 figure. The table’s highest total is 3,912 in 2004–05, while slight injuries peak at 3,424 that year. Your statement that fatal injuries rose by 18% “from 2005 to 2007” misstates the comparison period: the percentage row compares 1998–99 with 2006–07 for fatalities and with 2005–06 for the other categories. Select a few accurate trends and give a clear overview before supporting them with figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, a paragraph describing the figures, and a final paragraph about percentage changes. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several ideas are crowded into long sentences, and the comparisons are not grouped clearly. For example, the second paragraph moves from slight injuries to the early years and then to a supposed 2007 peak without clear links. The final paragraph repeats “in the same years” but does not establish which years are being compared. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and key details, and organise the figures by category or by the overall trend. More precise linking and referencing would make the relationships between figures easier to understand.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “fatal,” “seriously injured,” “percentage,” and “increased,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “people that were injured,” “the fatal ones,” and “in a very drastic manner.” The phrase “injured slightly” is also an awkward way to describe the slight-injury category, while “342 total number of people” confuses a percentage with a count. Aim for concise, accurate table language and vary the terms used for figures and trends. For example, refer to “slight injuries” and “the total number of recorded injuries,” and use “rose substantially” only when the data supports that description.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, but control is uneven, and errors sometimes make the relationships between ideas unclear. The opening sentence has an awkward structure: “and also an increase was also noted” repeats the same linking idea. In “the highest number of people that were injured slightly due to gun or knife that the highest number that was for about 3821,” the clause structure breaks down and the intended comparison is difficult to recover. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and punctuation, as in “the level of injuries were noted very less” and the comma splice before “The seriously injured.” Build shorter, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses where they clarify a comparison.

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