Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table given below compares and contrasts the data on the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in great britian from 1998 and 2007 and over the period the percentage increase for each degree of injury.

Overall,it is evident that the percentage of serious injuries recorded the highest figure.whereas fatal injuries accounted the lowest figure. Additionally the total number of injuries skyrocked with slight injuries.

Intially,1998 to 1999 fatal injuries stood at 49.Regarding the serious and slight injuries stood at 162 and 653 which made the total of 864 injuries.over the period the numbers had increased and by the period [redacted phone] the number of fatal injuries had risen to 95 with slight and serious injuries the total number skyrocket to 1877.

During the period [redacted phone] the fatal injuries recorded at 80 with slight and serious injuries the total number reached 2179 and by [redacted phone] the total number reached its highest record 3821.Regarding the percentage increase slight injuries recorded the highest figure followed by fatal injuries at 18% and serious injuries at 194%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the table’s subject and include an overview, noting that slight injuries and the total rose substantially. However, the overview misreports the ranking: serious injuries did not have the highest percentage increase; slight injuries rose most (405%), followed by serious injuries (194%), while fatal injuries increased by 18%. The response also gives only a limited selection of figures and does not clearly describe the overall progression across the years. In particular, 3,821 is the total for 2005–06, not 2006–07; the latter year has no total shown. To strengthen the report, accurately compare the main categories and highlight the sharp rise in slight injuries and the peak total in 2004–05.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to two paragraphs of figures, and time markers such as “Initially” and “During the period 2002–2003” help signal sequence. However, progression is not consistently clear because several figures are crowded into long sentences, for example the sentence beginning “by the period 2001-2002,” where the relationship between injury categories and the total is difficult to follow. Some linking is also mechanical or unclear, particularly repeated uses of “Regarding” and “with.” Organise the body around clear comparisons or stages, and give each sentence one main point. This would make the information easier to follow and reduce ambiguity.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing data, including “percentage increase,” “accounted,” “stood at,” and “recorded.” There is also an attempt to vary language with “compares and contrasts” and “skyrocketed.” However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or awkward: “the percentage of serious injuries recorded the highest figure” confuses the percentage increase with the number of injuries, while “total number skyrocket” is an unsuitable form and collocation. Spelling errors such as “britian,” “Intially,” and “skyrocked” also reduce accuracy. Use precise terms such as “proportion,” “number,” and “increase,” and check spelling and collocations when describing trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, and the response generally communicates the topic and several figures. However, complex constructions are often faulty, as in “Regarding the serious and slight injuries stood at 162 and 653,” which lacks a clear grammatical connection, and “with slight and serious injuries the total number skyrocket to 1877,” where the clause structure and verb form are incorrect. There are also recurring punctuation and sentence-boundary problems, such as missing spaces after full stops and commas, and “Overall,it is evident.” Articles and phrasing are sometimes incomplete, as in “fatal injuries recorded at 80.” Build shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them carefully using accurate clauses and consistent past-tense verbs.

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