Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The supplied table demonstrates the number of residents of UK getting injured by guns and knives during [redacted phone], categorizing the injuries in three groups: fatal, serious and slight.
Overall, the fraction of folks hurt slightly dominated over this period and is exceling the other two groups, while the fatal injuries are very few.
The people affected by fatal criminal events kept increasing till 2003 when the number had reached 80. Later on their number started to decline and reached 58 in 2007.
On the other hand, starting from 162, the number of citizens having serious injuries has reached the apex of 476 in 2006.
Lastly, the persons having slight injuries were 653 during1999 and surged to 3296 people during 2006.
In conclusion, majority of the people were injured slightly and the percentage increase of these injuries is exceeding all the others, even the total number of injuries.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified the main features and provided some comparisons, the analysis is somewhat superficial. You have selected key data points, but the report lacks a more comprehensive overview of the trends. For instance, the percentage increase data mentioned in the prompt is largely ignored in the body paragraphs, and the conclusion is slightly repetitive. To improve, ensure you fully explore all aspects of the prompt, including the percentage data, and provide a more detailed comparison between the categories to ensure the response is sufficiently developed and meets the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'On the other hand' and 'Lastly' to transition between ideas. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat mechanical, and the paragraphing could be more sophisticated. The referencing is generally clear, but the overall flow feels a bit disjointed due to the brevity of the sentences. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of cohesive devices to link sentences and paragraphs more fluidly, and ensure that the relationship between the data points is clearly articulated throughout the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and variety expected at higher levels. Phrases like 'folks hurt' and 'exceling the other two groups' are informal or misused in this context. You rely on simple descriptors and repetitive structures. To improve, incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data analysis, such as 'fluctuated,' 'peaked,' or 'dramatic increase.' Avoid informal language like 'folks' and ensure that your word choices are accurate and appropriate for a formal report. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you avoid repetition and demonstrate a better command of the language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are several grammatical inaccuracies. For example, 'the fraction of folks hurt slightly dominated' is awkward, and 'during1999' contains a spacing error. There are also issues with article usage and prepositional phrases (e.g., 'the number of citizens having serious injuries'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to affect the overall quality. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed accurately. Proofreading for minor slips and punctuation errors will also help improve your score.
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