Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The table compares the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and also shows the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period

Overall, the significant number of people got slight injured throughout the period while fatal injuries were at the lowest.

In [redacted phone], only 49 people die due to fatal injury and this number fluctuated throughout the period, by the end of the year 58 people are died and total of 18% was injured over the period whereas 162 people had serious health issue in [redacted phone], this number increases gradually through out the period, and by the end 476 people had serious health condition and 194% people are admitted over the period.

In 1998 to 1999, 653 people admitted to hospital which is a considerably highest and this number also increases by 3296 by 2007 and 405 percent of people admitted to medical service over the period.

Overall, the noticeable feature is that a significant amount of people was admitted to hospital with slightly injury.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the table, including the three categories of injury and the percentage increases. However, the data presentation is somewhat inconsistent. For instance, the figures for 'slight' injuries are described as '653' in 1998-1999, which appears to be a misreading of the table data. Additionally, the summary of trends is present, but the comparison between categories could be more analytical. The overview is provided, but it lacks the precision required for a higher band score, as some data points are inaccurately reported or confusingly phrased.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'In 1998-1999', 'Overall'). The progression of ideas is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as the transition between the description of fatal injuries and serious injuries. While the paragraphing is present, the internal logic within paragraphs could be improved to ensure a smoother flow of information between the data points.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher levels. There are several instances of awkward word choice and grammatical errors involving word forms, such as 'slight injured' instead of 'slightly injured' and 'people are died' instead of 'people died'. The use of 'considerably highest' is also non-standard. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'significant increase' or 'fluctuated', and ensure correct word forms are used.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include '405 percent of people admitted to medical service' and 'by the end 476 people had serious health condition'. Subject-verb agreement and tense usage are inconsistent throughout the text (e.g., 'this number increases' vs 'this number also increases'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents a higher score.

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