Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The given chart shows the statistics of different range of injuries from gun and knife crimes between the year 1998 and 2007.

From the overall view, it is clear that the number of slight injuries largely bypass the number of serious and fatal injuries. Additionally, the crime rate was at peak in [redacted phone] while in the first year it was the least. From 1998 to 2007, the number of fatal injurie stayed between 49 to 95, which was the highest in [redacted phone]. On the other side, the rate of serious crime inclined by 194%. The peak number of it was recorded in the second last year. Interestingly, the serious and slight injuries were at zero during the last year.

Observing the total numbers, [redacted phone] had highest crime of 3912 out of which 3296 were slight injuries. Noticebly, fatal crime were merely 49. moreover, the inclination rate was 18%, 194% and 405% respectively for different degrees of injuries.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.0
Coherence and Cohesion6.5
Lexical Resource6.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy6.0
Overall6.5

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have identified the main features of the data, such as the overall trend and the dominance of slight injuries. However, the report contains significant factual inaccuracies based on the provided data. For example, you state that serious and slight injuries were at zero during the last year, which is not supported by the table. Additionally, the description of the peak years is somewhat confusing. To improve, ensure that your data points are accurately transcribed and that you clearly distinguish between the different categories of injury. While you have attempted to make comparisons, the lack of precision in reporting the figures hinders the clarity of your summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Additionally', 'On the other side', and 'Interestingly' to link ideas. However, the progression of information is sometimes disjointed, particularly when jumping between years and injury types. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the transition between the overview and the specific data points could be smoother. Improving the logical flow between sentences would help to achieve a higher band score.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms such as 'statistics', 'inclined', and 'degrees of injuries'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'largely bypass' instead of 'significantly exceed', and 'inclination rate' instead of 'percentage increase'. There are also minor spelling errors like 'Noticebly'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring that collocations are natural and accurate in the context of data reporting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'fatal crime were merely 49' (subject-verb agreement) and 'had highest crime' (missing article). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are issues with sentence construction that occasionally impede the flow. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles, as these are recurring issues throughout your writing.

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