Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-07-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The table depicts the figure of injuries such as fatal, serious and slight from the gun and knife crime in Great Britain between 1998 and 2007 and the proportion incline for every injury over the same period.
Overall, the total number had increased significantly and serious and slightly injuries showed the same trend over the period, while fatal injury experienced fluctuation from 1998 to 2007.
The total number of injuries showed a considerable growth, starting from 864 in [redacted phone] to 3821 in [redacted phone], the total percentage had the second highest value at 342%. The fatal injury showed fluctuation, increasing from 49 cases to 95 cases in [redacted phone], before decreasing to 58 cases in the end, it had the lowest total proportion at 18%.
The serious and slightly cases experienced a significant increase, starting from 162 cases in [redacted phone] to 476 cases in [redacted phone], the total percentage were at 194% and from 653 to 3296 cases in the end, slightly injuries had the highest total percentage at 405%, respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
You have successfully identified the main features of the data, including the overall trends and specific figures for fatal, serious, and slight injuries. You also made relevant comparisons between the categories. However, the report could be improved by ensuring the data points are presented with greater clarity. For instance, the phrasing 'the total percentage were at 194% and from 653 to 3296 cases in the end' is slightly confusing to follow. To reach a higher band, ensure that the relationship between the years and the categories is explicitly stated to avoid ambiguity for the reader. Overall, you have covered all parts of the task well.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The response is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Overall' and 'starting from', to guide the reader. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing could be more precise. For example, in the final paragraph, the use of 'respectively' at the end of the sentence is slightly awkward given the structure of the preceding clauses. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuation', 'proportion', and 'considerable growth'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'proportion incline' is not standard English; 'percentage increase' would be more appropriate. Additionally, 'slightly injuries' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'slight injuries'. While these errors do not impede communication, they limit your score. To improve, focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensure that you use the correct word forms (adjectives vs. nouns) when describing data trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'the figure of injuries such as fatal, serious and slight' (should be 'the number of fatal, serious, and slight injuries') and 'the total percentage were' (should be 'was'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding the information. To achieve a higher band, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences will also help demonstrate better control over your grammar.
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