Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 6.0)

this table shows us the report of the gun and knife crime in the Britain and the the injuries due to this from 1998 to 2007.

according to report in year 2004 to 2005 highest injuries ratio can be seen in this report which are highest in the report as well. which have 77 fatal injuries, 411 serious injuries and slight injuries are 3424. their sum is about 3912. and in year 1998 to 1999 the total injuries are very less according to report. which have 49 fata injuries, serious injuries are 162 slight injuries are 653 and the total is about 864.

in [redacted phone] have 1195 total injuries and slight increase in [redacted phone] and the total injuries are 1382. in [redacted phone] the ratio increase more and the injuries sum is about 1877. in 2002 -2004 the injuries ratio was slight different and reached to the 2367. but in [redacted phone] the ratio is far high the we think which is about 3821 and this was second highest ratio in the graph.

the percentage increase in 99/99-2005/2006 or 06/07 is 18% in fatal injuries 194% in serious and slight is about 405 and their sum increase is is 342%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the data, such as the peak in 2004-2005 and the overall upward trend. However, the reporting is inconsistent and lacks a clear overview. The student lists specific data points rather than synthesising the information effectively. The final paragraph regarding percentage increases is confusing and does not accurately reflect the data provided in the table. To improve, you should group data logically and provide a clear summary statement in the introduction that highlights the overall trend rather than just describing the table's content.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and often mechanical (e.g., 'in 1999-2000', 'in 2001-2002'). There is a lack of variety in linking words, and some transitions between sentences are abrupt. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of data points. Improving the use of cohesive devices like 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'furthermore' would help create a smoother flow between ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Words like 'ratio', 'report', and 'injuries' are used repeatedly, often incorrectly (e.g., 'highest injuries ratio'). There are also issues with word choice, such as 'very less' instead of 'much lower' and 'far high the we think' which is informal and inaccurate. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe statistical trends. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'significant increase', and 'dramatic rise'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('in the Britain'), subject-verb agreement issues ('1999-2000 have'), and incorrect sentence structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many sentence fragments (e.g., 'which have 77 fatal injuries'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction limits the score. You should focus on mastering simple sentence structures before attempting more complex ones, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb.

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