Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The Tabular representation illustrates the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crimes in great Britain from 1998 and 2007 also the increase the percentile for each degree of injury our the time.
To comments with, slight injuries top in these great the crime of great Britain in every year but having maximum crime about 3296 in the year [redacted phone]. Moreover, this injury start forom very lower from 1998 to 1999 respectively. Whereas, the Coloumns of serious injuries shows average number of percentum for each degree what's more that it is increased every year over the period.
moving towards the rest of data, the ratio of gun and knife crimes in fatal injuries resulting very low in most of the year. Furthermore, in [redacted phone] having about 49% in the category of fatal injury Besides, it slowly increase over the time and last it step at 58% in [redacted phone].
overall, it can be seen that gun and knife crimes provided by great Britain are slight injury show maximum popularity among crime.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the provided data. However, the information is presented in a fragmented and often inaccurate manner. While you identify the categories (fatal, serious, slight), the specific data points are frequently misquoted or unclear, such as the claim that slight injuries peaked in 2005-2006 without clear reference to the table's actual figures. The summary lacks a clear overview of the main trends, and the comparison between categories is underdeveloped. To improve, ensure you accurately extract key figures and provide a clear, concise summary of the overall trends rather than listing isolated, confusing statistics.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear transitions. Phrases like 'To comments with' and 'moving towards the rest of data' are used incorrectly, which hinders the progression of ideas. Referencing is often ambiguous, making it difficult for the reader to follow which data point relates to which year or category. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices, they are often misused or mechanical, leading to a lack of overall coherence. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring clear topic sentences would significantly enhance the structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and frequently inaccurate, which often obscures the intended meaning. Terms like 'percentile' are used incorrectly instead of 'percentage', and 'top in these great the crime' is non-standard and confusing. There is a lack of precision in describing statistical trends; for example, 'last it step at' is not appropriate for academic writing. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'accounted for') and ensure that word choices are contextually appropriate and grammatically correct.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('this injury start forom'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence structures ('the ratio of gun and knife crimes in fatal injuries resulting very low'). The use of complex sentence structures is attempted but is consistently faulty, leading to confusion. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and sentence boundaries. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors in articles and prepositions.
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