Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table illustrates about total injuries which are held in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007, a lot of injuries including fatal, serious and slight injuries.
Overall, the total number of injuries rose substantially during the period. Slight injuries were by far the most common types in every year and increased over the period. Whereas falat injuries was the least frequent.
In [redacted phone], there were 864 total injuries recorded comprising 49 fatal, 162 serious and 653 slight. Slight injuries were most in these years. After that, in [redacted phone] slight injuries increased among last 6 years. In [redacted phone] slight injuries increased over the year and and it was the most slight injuries. There are no injuries records on [redacted phone].
Serious injuries followed a more consistent upward trend, rising steadily from 162 to 476 over the period, increasing persantage was 194%. In [redacted phone] the serious injuries was 162 and at the end of 2006 it reached to 476. The ratio of fatal injuries were slightly downward. In [redacted phone] people faces the most injuries.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, such as the overall upward trend and the dominance of slight injuries. However, the analysis is hampered by inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you mention 'there are no injuries records on 2006-2007', which is a misinterpretation of the table, and the claim that 'the ratio of fatal injuries were slightly downward' is not clearly supported by the provided figures. While you identify the main trends, the lack of precision in reporting specific data points and the misreading of the table structure prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure you carefully verify the figures against the table before writing.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the flow between sentences is often mechanical and sometimes confusing. For example, the transition 'After that, in 2001-2002 slight injuries increased among last 6 years' is unclear and lacks logical progression. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often repetitive or incorrectly applied. The paragraphing is present, but the internal logic within the paragraphs needs to be more cohesive to ensure that the relationship between the data points is clearly communicated to the reader.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. You use basic terms like 'a lot of' and 'most common types'. There are also spelling errors such as 'falat' (fatal) and 'persantage' (percentage). While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'upward trend' and 'recorded', the range is limited. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that you proofread your work to eliminate basic spelling mistakes that detract from the professional tone of your report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'The table illustrates about total injuries which are held' (should be 'illustrates the total injuries that occurred') and 'the serious injuries was 162' (subject-verb agreement error). Additionally, there are issues with article usage and tense consistency. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors suggests that you need to focus on basic grammatical accuracy, particularly subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions, to improve your score.
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