Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table presents the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries caused by gun and knife crime in Great Britain between 1998 to 2007, as well as the percentage rise for the injury over the period.
Overall, the injuries were far by common through the period of time, where as the fatal injuries remains least frequent, In addition all the injuries have increased over the time, with slight injuries was recorded the greatest.
Initially, there were only 49 fatal injuries, 162 serious injuries, 653 slight injuries and the total injuries recorded was 864. The years passed and these injuries were gradually raised, by the year 2005 - 2006 the slight injuries was dramatically increased to 3821.
Regarding all the percentage of injuries increased, the slight injuries have recorded the highest with 405%, the total number of injuries with 342% and serious injuries have accounted 194%, the least recorded was fatal injuries with 18%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response provides a basic overview of the data, but it fails to fully address the task requirements. While you identify the main trends, the description of the data is incomplete and lacks precision. For example, you mention the 2005-2006 period but do not provide a comprehensive comparison across the entire timeframe. The summary of percentage increases is present, but the analysis is superficial. To improve, ensure you select more key data points to support your observations and provide a more balanced comparison between the categories of injury throughout the period, rather than just listing figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'where as' and 'In addition all the injuries have increased'. The transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is somewhat abrupt. While there is a logical progression from general trends to specific data, the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the flow feel disjointed. Improving the variety and accuracy of your cohesive devices will help the ideas connect more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for a higher band. You rely on repetitive phrasing such as 'injuries were recorded' and 'injuries have increased'. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'far by common' and 'gradually raised'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of synonyms and more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'surged', 'fluctuated', or 'a significant rise'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('fatal injuries remains', 'slight injuries was recorded') and incorrect tense usage ('injuries were gradually raised'). The sentence structures are relatively simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring consistent tense usage when describing historical data. Proofreading for small errors like missing articles or incorrect prepositions will also help improve your score.
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