Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The injuries caused by knife and gun leading to fatal, serious and slight condition of a human being from [redacted phone] in Great Britain has been given in the table representing statistically using tabular format.
During the period of [redacted phone] total injuries reported were nearly eight hundred sixty four from which most of them were slightly injured, more than one hundred and fifty were seriously harmed and forty nine resulted in fatal condition.
From 1998 to 2002 total nuber of injuries increased from 864 to, shockingly 1877 from which majorly were again slightly harmed where as nearly 400 were serious and 95 were fatal.
From 2002 to 2006 numbers bumped drastically from 2179 to 3821 which indicated that more than 3.2k were slighly injured, nearly 500 were serious and 49 were fatal.
However the most injuries seen was in 2005, which was 3912 yet it wasn't exactly the deadliest year according to the data given; the deadliest year was [redacted phone] which has 95 fatal injuries.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the data, such as the overall increase in injuries and the identification of specific years. However, the analysis is somewhat fragmented and lacks a clear overview of the trends. While you mention specific figures, the reporting is inconsistent; for instance, you describe the 2002-2006 period but omit the final year (2007) provided in the data. To reach a higher band, ensure you present a clear summary of the overall trend in the introduction and ensure all key data points are accurately represented without missing the final year of the period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., starting multiple paragraphs with 'From...'). The transition between the data points is occasionally abrupt, and the logical flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to show relationships between the years and the types of injuries. Referencing is generally clear, but the overall structure feels more like a list of observations than a cohesive summary.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely on basic descriptors like 'harmed' and 'injured' repeatedly. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'fatal condition of a human being' and 'numbers bumped drastically'. To improve, try to use more academic terminology related to data reporting, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'a significant rise'. Spelling is generally accurate, but the range of vocabulary is limited, which prevents the response from achieving a higher score in this criterion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'The injuries... has been given' is a subject-verb agreement error, and 'total nuber' contains a spelling mistake. There are also issues with punctuation and phrasing, such as 'from which most of them were slightly injured'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall fluency. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and more precise sentence construction will help improve your score.
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