Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table illustrates the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries that occurred due to gun and knife crime in Great Britain from [redacted phone] and also the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Over the nine years period, the number of slightly injured and seriously injured people rose steadily for upto 6 years and then fluctuated but the number of fatals did not follow the same trend.
The highest number of fatalities resulted in the year [redacted phone] which was 95, 476 people seriously injured which was highest in the year [redacted phone] and 3424 People got slightly injured which was highest In the year [redacted phone].
While most of the injured people got recovered, a subsequent number of people had increased degree of injury over the 9 period- in case of fatal, it was 18%, 194% in case of serious injury and 405% increase in slightly injured people.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by summarizing the main features of the provided table. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identify the peak years for each category, the description of trends is vague (e.g., 'rose steadily for upto 6 years'). Furthermore, the interpretation of the percentage increase data is slightly inaccurate, as you describe it as 'recovered' people, which is not supported by the data. To improve, ensure you provide more precise data points and avoid making assumptions about the nature of the injuries that are not explicitly stated in the table. The overview is present but lacks a clear synthesis of the overall trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and occasionally mechanical (e.g., 'While most of the injured people...'). The transition between the description of the trends and the percentage increase section is abrupt. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your sentences and paragraphs more fluidly, ensuring that the relationship between the data points is clearly articulated for the reader.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. You rely on basic descriptors like 'highest' and 'rose'. There are also some awkward phrasing choices, such as 'number of fatals' and 'subsequent number of people had increased degree of injury'. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to data trends, such as 'peaked', 'fluctuated', 'significant', or 'dramatic', and ensure that your word choices are contextually accurate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity, such as 'The highest number of fatalities resulted in the year 2001-2002 which was 95', where the subject-verb agreement and reference are unclear. Additionally, there are issues with capitalization (e.g., 'In the year') and punctuation. To improve, focus on sentence construction, particularly in ensuring that relative clauses are correctly attached to the nouns they modify, and proofread for minor errors in articles and prepositions.
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