Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table shows the injuries caused by gun and knife crime in the great Britain between the year 1998 and 2007 . The table shows that 3 types of injuries have happened by gun and knife crime . The first one is fatal , the second one is serious and third one is slight and then it shows the total number of injuries happened in years .

Teh teh first data shows that in [redacted phone] the fatal injuries were 49, serious injuries were 162 and slight injuries were 653 in total it shows that 864 injuries are occured .

In year [redacted phone] fatal injuries are 62, serious injuries were 200 and slight injuries were 1195 .

In the year 2000-21 the fatal injuries were 72 , serious injuries were 244 and slight injuries were 1066 and in total it shows 1382.

In the year [redacted phone] fatal injuries were 95, serious injuries were 392 and slight injuries were 1877 .

In the year 2002 -2003 fatal injuries were 80 , serious injuries were 416 and slight injuries were 1683 and in total it shows 2179.

So , we can clearly see that year by year the injuries were rapidly increasing which is not good fro any nation individuals and also it shows how rapidly the crime were increasing and it also shows that individuals were less safe even in there hometowns and also goverment should take some steps to prevent all this causes

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to provide an effective overview of the data, instead listing figures year-by-year in a repetitive manner. While the task requires selecting and reporting main features, the student merely transcribes data points without identifying trends or making meaningful comparisons between the categories (gun vs. knife) or the degrees of injury. The inclusion of personal opinions about crime and government policy at the end is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report, which should remain objective and analytical. To improve, focus on grouping data to highlight significant trends, such as the overall increase in injuries, rather than listing every individual year.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. The paragraphs are poorly defined, and the progression of ideas is mechanical, relying on repetitive sentence starters like 'In the year...'. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; the transition between the data description and the concluding opinion is abrupt and disjointed. The use of 'So' to begin the final paragraph is too informal for an academic report. To improve, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') and ensure each paragraph has a clear, distinct purpose, such as an overview, a detailed analysis of trends, and a summary of key comparisons.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'the first one is', 'the second one is', and 'it shows' are used repeatedly, which restricts the range of expression. There are also spelling errors such as 'Teh' instead of 'The' and 'fro' instead of 'for'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe statistical trends, relying on basic descriptors like 'increasing'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to data analysis, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'significant rise', or 'proportionate', and ensure accurate spelling throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with article usage ('the great Britain'), subject-verb agreement ('injuries are occured'), and tense consistency. The sentence structures are predominantly simple, with little evidence of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas and hyphens. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses when discussing past data, and practicing the use of complex structures like relative clauses or passive voice to describe the data more professionally.

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