Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table illustrates the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries occurring due to gun and knife crime in Britain between 1998 to 2007 as well as the proportion increases for each degree of injury throughout the period.

Examining the data of the year [redacted phone], the total proportion of injury was 864 in that the highest figure was noted for slight injury at 653 cases. Following this, serious injury accounted for 162 as well as fatal wound recorded meagre figure.

By 1999 to 2000, the figure was observed increase sharply. The total crime was increased due to the cases of injuries in each degree, reached a level of 1195.

After the decades, the proportion was strip to the peak. In [redacted phone], the figures reached the level of 2179, which was more than double compared to previous year. However, the figure experienced slight drop in the crime cases of fatal category.

Over the period, the degree of serious and slight injury reached their peak at around 476 and 3296 in the year [redacted phone], showing a peak level. In contrast, the proportion was reached the level of zero at the end. In that highest percentage was noted for slight injury over the period at around 405,

Overall, the degree of injury rose dramatically over the period except the last year. The total was showed the only few cases for fatal injury at the end.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover the data provided, but there are significant issues with accuracy and clarity. You have identified some key figures, but the interpretation of the data is often confusing or incorrect. For example, you mention a 'proportion' of 864 and 1195, which seems to misinterpret the raw numbers provided in the table. Furthermore, the description of the trends is inconsistent, and the final paragraph contains contradictory information regarding the 'zero' level and the final figures. To improve, ensure you accurately transcribe the data and focus on clear, comparative reporting of the main trends rather than listing isolated figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently interrupted by unclear phrasing and awkward transitions. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Following this' and 'In contrast', they are often used incorrectly or do not logically connect the preceding and following ideas. The referencing is sometimes ambiguous, making it difficult for the reader to follow the development of the trends. To reach a higher band, focus on using cohesive devices to link sentences and paragraphs more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'proportion' where 'number' or 'figure' would be more accurate. There are also instances of awkward word choices, such as 'fatal wound recorded meagre figure' and 'the proportion was strip to the peak'. These errors occasionally make the meaning unclear. To improve, work on using more precise terminology for describing statistical trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', and ensure you are using words in their correct collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('The total was showed'), subject-verb agreement errors ('the figure was observed increase'), and awkward sentence construction ('the proportion was reached the level of zero'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally impede the flow of the text. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures and proofreading for common errors such as article usage, verb forms, and prepositions.

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