Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table shows the numbers of unavoidable results of crime that commited by Britain from 1998 between 2007. The table also illustrates the upward trend by numbers.

It can be observed that in year 1998 to 1999 there was total 864 cases were accounted in, which serious cases were 162 in number, whereas slightly had 653 and the fatal contained 49. Afer this from the year of 1999 till 2002 the upward trend can seen in all cases inculding total.

However the numbers has been declined in 2003, that was almost 80, moreover 2005 it is followed the same trend as previous years. In last years from 2006 to 2007 the cases of serious injuries and blight almost negligible whereas it has fatal cases with total 58 in numbers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. While you have attempted to identify some trends, the summary is incomplete and lacks a clear overview of the main features. The data interpretation is also inaccurate; for instance, you mention a decline in 2003 and specific figures for 2006-2007 that do not align with standard interpretations of such datasets. To improve, ensure you cover all categories (fatal, serious, slight) consistently across the entire period and provide a clear, accurate summary of the overall trends rather than listing isolated figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes misused, such as the transition 'However the numbers has been declined in 2003', which does not effectively link the preceding information. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logic of the data presentation. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as grouping data by trends rather than just listing years.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'unavoidable results of crime' and 'blight' (likely intended to mean 'slight'). The phrasing 'total 864 cases were accounted in' is unnatural. To reach a higher band, you need to use a more precise range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant surge'. Avoid using informal or imprecise language and focus on using subject-specific terminology correctly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'crime that commited by Britain' (passive voice error), 'there was total 864 cases were accounted in' (redundant verb usage), and 'the numbers has been declined' (subject-verb agreement and tense error). The sentence structures are predominantly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of passive voice, which is essential for describing data in Task 1.

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