Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given image represents the proportion of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

First of all, we can see that the year of injury in great Britain from gun and knife crime statistics in 1998 to 2007.

in started 1998 to 1999 fatal injuries around of 49. Which had consist increased around 95 in 2002. Moreover, it d

had drastically fell down in 2005 to 2006 respectively, it was increased account of 18% in 2007. Whereas in 1999, serious injuries had 162, it had consist progress in 2006. which was increase around 194% in all years.

Furthermore, in 1998 the slight injuries had started approximately of 653%, it had constant developed in 2005. In 2007 , it was dramatically fell down around 3296%. The slight injuries increase of account 405%.

Overall, the slight injuries improved 405% amongst than others injuries. secondly, serious injuries were progress in 194%. lastly, fatal injuries were fell down amongst than injuries. The total injuries around in 342.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to accurately report the data. The figures provided (e.g., '653%' or '3296%') do not correspond to the provided table, suggesting a misunderstanding of the data or a failure to read the chart correctly. While the response identifies the categories (fatal, serious, slight), the lack of accurate data reporting and the failure to make meaningful comparisons between the categories significantly hinders the task achievement. The summary is confusing and does not provide a clear overview of the trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused (e.g., 'First of all', 'Whereas', 'Furthermore'). The progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the sentences are disjointed and the referencing is unclear. The transition between the data points is abrupt, and the overall structure lacks the cohesion required for a higher band score.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly. Phrases like 'consist increased', 'constant developed', and 'dramatically fell down' demonstrate a lack of control over collocations and word forms. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing trends (e.g., 'improved' is used for an increase in injuries, which is contextually inappropriate). The range is insufficient to convey the information accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are significant issues with verb tenses ('it was increased', 'it had consist progress'), sentence structure (fragments like 'in started 1998 to 1999'), and subject-verb agreement. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, making the text difficult to read.

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