Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.0)

INTRODUCTION:

This table give us the information about the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007.

And can also give us the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Nowadays doing crime is easy because our system is not good,doing crime is easy because they know that we are not being catch so they do not have a fear of being catch.

MAIN BODY:

Crime is increasing day by day and criminals when they do crimes they also do many injuries from guns and knife injuries increasing day by day and the percentage of injuries also increases.

This graph give us the total percentage of injuries.In[redacted phone] total percentage of damage percent is 864..In [redacted phone] total rate of damage percent is 1195..In [redacted phone] total rate of damage percent is 1382..In [redacted phone] total rate of damage percent is 2179..In [redacted phone] total rate of damage percent is 2179..In 2004 total rate of damage percent is 3912..In 2005total rate of damage percent is 3821.

CONCLUSION:

Crime is increasing day by day and injuries also increase day by day.Government should take a step to stop the crime ans solve our problems and control injuries of peoples.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response fails to meet the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report. Instead of objectively summarizing the data from the table, you have included personal opinions about the justice system and crime rates, which are irrelevant to the task. Furthermore, the data provided is inaccurate and poorly presented; you have listed figures that do not clearly correspond to the categories of fatal, serious, and slight injuries, and the formatting is confusing. To improve, you must focus solely on describing the trends and comparing the figures provided in the prompt without adding external commentary or subjective analysis.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. While you have used headings like 'INTRODUCTION' and 'MAIN BODY', the content within these sections does not follow a coherent progression. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'day by day'. Paragraphing is present but does not serve to organize the information effectively. The transition between the introduction and the body is abrupt, and the conclusion introduces no summary of the data, instead offering a generic statement about government policy.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Your vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic words like 'crime', 'injuries', and 'doing'. There is little attempt to use academic or precise vocabulary suitable for describing statistical data. Phrases such as 'total rate of damage percent' are imprecise and do not accurately describe the figures in the table. To reach a higher band, you should learn specific terminology for reporting data, such as 'significant increase', 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'This table give us'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'we are not being catch'), and punctuation errors, such as the misuse of periods and spacing. The sentence structures are predominantly simple and repetitive. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring correct tense usage and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures.

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