Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table illustrates the number of fatal,serious and slight injuries resulting from many instruments such as gun and knife crime in Great Britian from 1998 to 2007 and crime ratio increase for each degree of injury over the time period.

Overall,the table represent statistics of crime by gun and knife in Great Britian over seven years .There are too much crime rate about a year [redacted phone]. According to data the year about [redacted phone] in these year the crime ratio is less than all remaining years.

The data shows the injury rate in Britian .In 1998to 1999 no much injuries are appeared fatal about 49 and serious is 162 slight is also 653 and total is 864.In 1999 to 2001 these both years are realtively same not much difference.After that the year about 2002 to 2005 there are not too much increase in injuries.The level of injuries werte increase in a year about 2005 to2006 total injuries is 3912 and also increase in 2006 to 2007.

As conclusion,the table shows the statistics of injuries of Great Britian a year 1998 to 2007.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarise the data but fails to provide a clear overview or highlight the most significant trends effectively. While you mention the 2005-2006 period, the description of the data is largely a list of numbers rather than a synthesis of the main features. You have not adequately compared the categories (fatal, serious, slight) or the percentage increases mentioned in the prompt. To improve, focus on grouping data points to show trends over time rather than listing individual years, and ensure you explicitly address the percentage increase data provided in the table.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'In 1998 to 1999', 'After that', 'As conclusion'). Some sentences are disjointed, making the flow of information feel mechanical. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'these both years are relatively same', which does not clearly identify which years are being compared. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'crime', 'rate', 'increase', and 'injuries'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'no much injuries are appeared' and 'crime ratio increase'. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'significant growth'. Additionally, ensure you use precise terminology for statistical data, such as 'figures', 'proportions', or 'data points'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('The level of injuries werte increase'), article usage ('in a year about 2005'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or contain fragments, which limits your ability to demonstrate a range of complex structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like verb tense consistency and pluralisation.

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